I Count Sheep

[rickyknight1]

You guys have it all wrong, SAS thought I posted "LOL", to which I replied I didnt. I appreciate everything else you guys are bringing to the table, how did we even get this far? Do I even strike you as that kind of person to ignore thoughtful help? I should be offended by all of this but im not, I think we are having a misunderstanding.

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[rickyknight1]

Hmmmm. Guess I've no idea what you mean. I'll just assume you don't want poems workshopped. Workshop usually is more of a give and take. But, not a problem.

Read my latest comment above and respond please.

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[rickyknight1]

Thanks for the "heads up"... I won't be posting any comments on your poetry.
I do not think that a simple " THANK YOU" is an unnecessary comment... sure you click the "Thanks "button... but a comment would be nice... it is just good manners.

Read my latest comment above and respond please.

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[Ptolemy]

Yea I kinda feel like there was a form of overreaction, then some gross overestimation in the implied intent.

[rickyknight1]

Yea I kinda feel like there was a form of overreaction, then some gross overestimation in the implied intent.

thank you.

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[Firemajic]

Read my latest comment above and respond please.

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Please accept my sincere apologies, my goals, as a Mentor are to offer you encouragement, support and inspiration...

[Sebald]

thank you.

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Ricky. Buddy. People aren't gonna wanna critique you if you act like this.

Sas might have put a whole morning into your poem. A day. It deserves more than a Like click.

[Gumby]

I like this poem, Ricky, and I agree with sas that it could be made even better with a little judicious trimming. I don't want to rewrite your poem, so this is just to show you what I mean:

My soul grows cold night after night
I sleep in forbidden darkness
awaiting what lies beneath.

Makes it more immediate

I've become a devil myself
like the crooked edge of a rusty ole sword
like the poison antidote in my grandmother's tea
like the knife I shall use to slit her throat.

Just my personal opinion, not sure so many 'likes' help, I think they weaken it

I stand besides her door night after night--- not sure this repetition offers anything to the poem.
growing more brave.
I will never turn my other cheek nor will I pray for my enemies
they will all burn like the wild corn in a fire.

I won't go through the whole poem, but I wanted to give you my take on how to strengthen this by example. It's your poem and you have to decide how to write it, we just offer opinion.

[sas]

Ricky, The first response from you was just LOL. I don't mind those, but there wasn't anything funny. I waited for your response, as assumed you accidentally clicked it. Only later did "like" show up, but still no real response, or thank you (I see you knew how to say thank you to Potolomy), to my workshop efforts. I am not a mentor here, for a reason. I can say what's on my mind. I'm not apologizing.

[Ptolemy]

Ricky, The first response from you was just LOL. I don't mind those, but there wasn't anything funny. I waited for your response, as assumed you accidentally clicked it. Only later did "like" show up, but still no real response, or thank you (I see you knew how to say thank you to Potolomy), to my workshop efforts. I am not a mentor here, for a reason. I can say what's on my mind. I'm not apologizing.

I'll stand up for the little guy here.

I think the intent has been misinterpreted here. (As I've stated)

To me, an LOL is just as good as a Thank You. A LOL is a superficial tally that is intrinsically worthless overall, it's insignificant. It means next to nothing in this fragment of a life we live. I understand if you want a thank you, that's totally reasonable sas, however, I believe that Ricky didn't want to clutter the thread with multiple thank yous (for some reason). Your critique was great, thank you for it. He eventually 'liked' it too.

I don't always get a "thank you" for the hour to an hour and a half critiques I give out in prose. It's just a way of life, some people are not verbally thankful. That doesn't mean they do not appreciate it, or are not thankful. We just need to accept it and move on. Parsing on about it builds nothing but a negative sentiment.

You are also totally in your right to not apologize, I'm not (nor is anyone) forcing your hand here. I'm just stating that Ricky has seen the errors that he may have handled it differently than the norm, and has chalked it up as a misunderstanding. Which I agree, I believe there was a mix up in the signal fires here.

So, do how you do. I, nor anyone, will stop you sas, I'm just saying: I believe there was a communication error here that Ricky has already addressed.