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    Last edited by James 剣 斧 血; March 21st, 2019 at 04:27 PM.

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    It's short, obviously, but I liked it.

    I especially like the "moving well over the speed limit in a lethargic mind" line.


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    I'm not sure I like "quietening' but that's because my mouth wanted to say "quieting" when I read it. Otherwise, i really like it.
    Everything you want is just outside your comfort zone.
    Robert G. Allen

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    Quote Originally Posted by astroannie View Post
    I'm not sure I like "quietening' but that's because my mouth wanted to say "quieting" when I read it. Otherwise, i really like it.
    Reading it again, I think that's a great adjustment. (Edited now)

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