Ballet of the Beast (Mildly Sexual Themes)


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    Ballet of the Beast (Mildly Sexual Themes)

    Letís give the world back to the things that crawl
    On all fours now baby Iím ready to roll
    You think that you can just ignore my call
    But wonít you look real close at this animal?

    ďAnimal, itís such a pretty thing
    Animal, love with a violent ring
    Animal, I will control nothing
    Animal, and we singÖĒ

    I watch our shadows as they fall into line
    Only one moving is singularly mine
    Iím more than human; I am one of a kind
    You want to play? You better move right in time.

    This primal dance is what will keep us alive
    A bestiality for which we all strive
    Blood and sweat no more than a ritual tithe
    So come and lay down where we animals lie

    ďAnimal, itís such a pretty thing
    Animal, love with a violent ring
    Animal, I will control nothing
    Animal, and we singÖĒ

    Once I had you in my sight
    You never put up a fight
    Come on and turn off the light
    And have a taste of my,

    ďAnimal, itís such a pretty thing
    Animal, love with a violent ring
    Animal, I will control nothing
    Animal, and we singÖĒ






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    Intriguing piece. I couldn't pinpoint the sexuality reference until the final lines "come and turn off the light, and have a taste of my." When I read these lyrics I feel tempted. It's like you're trying to lure me in at my own risk. If that's what you're going for, I would make a few slight changes to make it more provocative..

    Change:
    You think that you can just ignore my call
    But wonít you look real close at this animal?
    -to-
    You think that you can just ignore my call
    But You don't want to provoke this animal..

    Change:
    Iím more than human; I am one of a kind
    You want to play? You better move right in time.
    -to-
    I'm more than human; I am one of a kind
    If you want to play, you better not waste my time..

    I think adding these changes, and any others you might find with this in mind, will increase the appeal that your lyrics carry. But again, it's only a suggestion. Keep up the good work!

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    “Animal, it’s such a pretty thing
    Animal, love with a violent ring
    Animal, I will control nothing-I feel like that line is just slightly forced. It doesn't quite fit perhaps because you already used the word thing in the first line.
    Animal, and we sing…”

    The only reason it sings is because it rhymes, that's not a bad thing. I could imagine this playing on the radio.

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    Letís give the world back to the things that crawl
    On all fours now baby Iím ready to roll
    You think that you can just ignore my call
    But you don't wanna provoke this animal

    ďAnimal, itís such a pretty thing
    Animal, love with a violent ring
    Animal, just a sexy something
    Animal, and we singÖĒ

    I watch our shadows as they fall into line
    Only one moving is singularly mine
    Iím more than human; I am one of a kind
    You want to play? You better move right in time.

    This primal dance is what will keep us alive
    A bestiality for which we all strive
    Blood and sweat no more than a ritual tithe
    So come and lay down where we animals lie

    ďAnimal, itís such a pretty thing
    Animal, love with a violent ring
    Animal, just a sexy something
    Animal, and we singÖĒ

    Once I had you in my sight
    You never put up a fight
    Come on and turn off the light
    And have a taste of my,

    ďAnimal, itís such a pretty thing
    Animal, love with a violent ring
    Animal, just a sexy something
    Animal, and we singÖĒ


    This better? I can't change the last lin of the second verse because its referring to the dance mention in the third verse

    you better move right in time
    --this primal dance..








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    Better. Or at least I think so.

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    Thank you






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    Great lyrics. Good theme. Pretty well written. Good job.

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    Thank you =)






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