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09/28/07 | Break Up Song (1 Viewer)

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valeca

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This LM Challenge is the brainchild of vangoghsear.

Your challenge this round is to write a humorous break up song. Please do not include music (original or otherwise) with your song.

Each song must be no longer than 200 words.

No parodies please.

All genres welcome.

Entries accepted until October 5, 2007. (1 week)

Each judge will also choose the entry they think is the funniest (which may or may not be the song they scored the highest).

Your judges this round are:
Hawke
Lost In Some Story
Foxee
Jiieden
 

vangoghsear

WF Veteran
WF Veterans
Surprise Package!

Not sure if I can enter for judging since it was my suggestion, but I wrote this this morning (I had been thinking of a writing a parody song, but i had to do an original to meet the criteria, so this one is all mine). About 190 words. Enjoy.\\:D/


Surprise Package!

©Vangoghsear 2007

(Intro)

She came home early from work one day
and found her man at home.
She heard him giggle in the room next door
and wondered if he was alone.

(Verse)
She found the door
opened a crack.
she peeked inside,
was taken aback.

She didn’t find
a girlfriend there,
but found him wearin'
her best underwear!

(Chorus)

He had her panties on,
the lacy kind,
sheer in the back
to show his behind!

Had her brassiere on
with his bust pushed up
and a water balloon
in each C cup.


(Verse)
Gaped in wonder
at her hairy man
sheer underwear,
showing his can.

His package tucked
between his thighs,
suspendered stockings
hurting her eyes! (Chorus)

(Verse)
She wondered why
her new underwear
was always stretched
beyond repair.

she wondered why
her panties seemed
to have skid marks,
they should be clean! (Chorus)

(Verse)
A transvestite!
Just her luck.
Decided then that
they should break up.

She’d pack her bags
and move away,
but leave her undies
'cause she’d remember the day! (chorus 2x)


Edits:
9-29-07: Overhauled the verses to make them better fit a pattern.
 
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Pete_C

WF Veterans
My Baby's So Cold

The sky it was dark, the wind it was blowing;
You picked up your bag and you said you were going.
My head it was swimming, digesting the facts
And then I saw red and quickly picked up the axe.

Chorus
I told you we belonged together,
You’ll be mine forever and ever.
You wanted to run off with some French geezer,
But I’ve got your body parts bagged up in my freezer.

I look into your eyes that were last filled with tears
As I hold up your head by your delicate ears.
I flicker my tongue along your full-bodied lips
Whilst remembering that I must defrost your hips.

Chorus

All around the house your perfume still lingers;
I play with myself, but using your fingers.
As the climax approaches, I get hold of your thumb
And shove it quite firmly, right up my bum.

Chorus

Your dismembered hand is busily jerking,
But I cannot cum; this just isn’t working.
I thought that I loved you, but that is all lost
So I press the red button that’s labelled “Defrost”.

Chorus
 

Loulou

WF Veterans
This, hopefully, isn't a parody as it's not imitating an actual work just taking the piss out of a stereotype. This may not translate well outside of the UK so I've put some definitions at the bottom.....



Innit
(A postmodern Chav break up song)

183 words

this is my song
wot I wrote innit
loyalty and respeck
you dint bring it
you maxed out my
credit card limit
buying your new slag
Joop perfume with it
take your Burberry tracker
and your fat arse in it

now sing it
innit

CHORUS
chavscum, we are done
buy your own weekend Stella
and your own fake gun
chavscum, you dint make me cum
buy your own bag of E’s
and your own fake gun

you was banned
from Iceland
for nickin’ fish fillets
and 7-up cans
wi’ your ASBO ban
and sovereign rings
you aint comin’ back
you aint my man
you got ‘er pregnant
wi’ just one bang

REPEAT CHORUS

gonna get wi’ antichav
go all emo in your face
he’s called cry-me-a-riva
on facebook n myspace
wi’ his razored arms
he’ll take your place
you totally is
a disssgrace
the love we had
a waste

REPEAT CHORUS

lay your townie head
on your leather chav bed
get your slag to suck
your dick instead
never did rate your skill
givin’ head
rather do myself
more cred

REPEAT CHORUS TO FADE





( NOTE - Chav is a derogatory slang term in popular usage throughout the UK. It refers to a subculture stereotype of a person who is uneducated, uncultured and prone to antisocial or immoral behaviour. The label is typically, though not exclusively, applied to teenagers and young adults of white working-class or lower-middle class origin. Chav is used for both sexes, where a male chav is sometimes referred to as a chavster and a female as a chavette.)

Definitions…..

Chavscum - the absolute worst of chavs
Iceland – cheap, chav-type frozen food store
Stella – beer choice of the chav
ASBO – Antisocial Behaviour Order
Burberry – brand preferred by chavs
Sovereign rings – preferred chav bling
Townie – another word for chav
Tracker – Track suit – every chav has one, usually tucked into socks
Slag - female chav who sleeps around

Good website……

http://www.chavscum.co.uk/
 
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Matthatter

Senior Member
She Was a Man

She Was a Man
©Matthatter 2007


(200 words)


(verse)

I saw this girl, so beautiful,
I had to make her mine.
I introduced myself, and held her hand,
as the moon passed through the sky.

I didn’t know it yet, so don’t blame me.
Believe me, I’m ashamed.
I don’t know how that this can happen;
I assure you, that I’m straight.

(chorus)

She was a man,
A man a man a man a man
A man a man a man
-- I can’t believe this.

She was a man
A man a man
Oh, my, god
A man a man a man
Tell me I’m dreaming.


(Verse)

She wasn’t any normal chick,
Her calves were strong, her neck was thick.
Dammit—how’d I miss it?!
I’m not gay.
Please believe this!

She invited me to her apartment
and I went.
Her room reeked of incense
and a manly Musk-y scent.

She lied down on her back and
pulled me to her thighs.
I bent down to her skirt and
prepared to lift it high.


(chorus)


My head so close, if
only I was blind…

I opened my up eyes and
laid them on my prize.

No delicate virgin
no clean-shaved lines,

but a lacey little thong,
with a bulge forced-fit inside.

(chorus)
 
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virtugirl333

Senior Member
You Dumped Me for My Brother


Oooh oooh
You took me by the hand
You looked in my eyes
You said “Sorry, babe
but I’ve got something on my mind.”

Chores:
Oh oh
Your brother’s so fine
Oh oh
Do ya think he’d be mine?
Oh oh
You dumped me for my brother
& I’m puttin’ you out of my mind

Oooh oooh
I left you standin’ there
I fought agnist my sorrow
How cold I not know?
Your words echo in my mind

(Repeat Chores)

Oh no no no!
I can’t believe it!
I can’t over it!

(Repeat Chores)

(Fade)
 

Charlie_Eleanor

Senior Member
I know this probably isn't suitable to everyone's humor, but I think it is funny :)...

Oh that happy day,
You came home to me.
I never thought you’d say,
‘Baby, you’re a daddy’

It makes it all worth it,
The fights,
The tears,
The years.

Inside you now,
Is a little guy or girl,
I promise you now,
I’d give them the world.

There is just one problem,
The father ain’t me.
I never told you, bitch,
‘Bout my secret vasectomy.

It makes it all worth it,
The fights,
The tears,
The years.

Inside you now,
Is a little guy or girl,
I hope your pro-choice, whore,
Cuz this ain’t my chore.

The problem is this,
The father ain’t me.
I never told you, bitch,
‘Bout my secret vasectomy.
 

smilinghelps

Senior Member
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Get Out Of My Box[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif](200 words)
[/FONT]


[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Verse 1[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Like sparks from an unoiled engine[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]You brightened up my life[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Grinding gears to a halt[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Like the world around us[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Your toothless grin and tatted body[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]And large collection of knives[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Persuaded me into our journey[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Upon a Greyhound Bus[/FONT]



[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Verse 2[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif][FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]The adventures we shared[/FONT][/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Digging in the trash[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]And nights we spent [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]In abandoned cars[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Must've been too much [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Of a wicked blast[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]For the man who dreamt[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Of drinking in bars[/FONT]


[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Chorus[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Get out of my box, you no good bum [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]It's my Frigidaire that I found myself [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]The sides stay up and it's got a roof [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]And you thought that I was so dumb! [/FONT]


[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Bridge[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Don't try to win me over [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]With your big gummy grin[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]It ain't gonna work no more [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Your fingers won't glide through [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]My greasy hair again[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]You'll be lucky to sleep on the floor. [/FONT]


[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Verse 3[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]I know what I saw with my own [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Beady eyes[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]You were with that chick [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]From stop thirty-two[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]You licked her cheek[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]And slapped her ass[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]And thought I didn't see you [/FONT]


[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Chorus Repeat[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Get out of my box, get out of my life [/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]You said that I was the one.[/FONT]
[FONT=Incised901 Bd BT, sans-serif]Get out of my box! Out of my stinkin' box![/FONT]
 

Hawke

Patron
Patron
Oops. This should have been closed. So I'll take the liberty of doing just that.


Okay judges, have at it!
 
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