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Venice inland...

Punk Rock Minnie Pearl rode by on her bicycle. Pedaled by on the path with her basket of black roses; plastic flowers in her basket, a gentle touch to a harder edge, like a dress with combat boots.

As she passed closer by she looked a bit sooty; dusty, and it made me wonder if she were a fraudulent civilian; one of those who hide their predicament, like a secret disease, leper, the shameful un-cleanliness of the residentially challenged.

I’ve seen it here: a woman who slept out of doors, dirt alley behind a garage, cleaned herself up, and rode off, looking every bit the part of yoga-mat toting, house-frau. Maybe up close the extra sun-lines show through. I didn’t want to stare too hard. That would be rude.

Have you ever read of Roman domestics? The servant class shows it in their bones. An impoverished life is not just skin deep.

I guided her as she past. Here, miss, I’ve put soil along the gravel here, so no sinking in. “Oh…” she said, or ‘did’ with her body-english/expression. A kindness, though hardly sustainable… So I had poured buckets in a line down the fresh gravel, and I think she was surprised. Does anyone care for her, I mean… does anyone share with her?

It is a hard world…

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Kevin great stuff, great imagery and powerful quips. I did get lost with the reference to soil on the gravel as it would be softer. Did you mean gravel on the soil as that would make her path firmer?
 
Plasticweld;bt4091 said:
Kevin great stuff, great imagery and powerful quips. I did get lost with the reference to soil on the gravel as it would be softer. Did you mean gravel on the soil as that would make her path firmer?
No... literally the city had come and dug things up. Last thing they did was spread a layer of 3/4" gravel like 4 -6" deep. People were going from hard-packed dirt to hitting the loose gravel on their bikes and nearly wiping out. I took buckets of dug up soil from the jobsite (which is really sticky clay when wet), and poured them in a line over the gravel about 10" wide and forty feet long. After about a day's worth of traffic the stuff compacted. That's now the preferred tread. No more sinking in, tipping.
 

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