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What's not to love? Neetu's Haiku are disciplined examples of the powerful short poems that are her hallmark. No one perceives the hidden expansiveness in ordinary phenomenon with the insight and skill she brings to bear. I like that in her Haiku she does not accept slavery to syllable-count. One observation and open question (ie, I don't know the answer): I occasionally found myself hesitating, 'hiccupping' ever so slightly in mid-line, the magic flow momentarily arrested. I found the problem to be THE COMMA. There is a natural rhythm in these Haiku--are the commas necessary at all?
 
What's not to love? Neetu's Haiku are disciplined examples of the powerful short poems that are her hallmark. No one perceives the hidden expansiveness in ordinary phenomenon with the insight and skill she brings to bear. I like that in her Haiku she does not accept slavery to syllable-count. One observation and open question (ie, I don't know the answer): I occasionally found myself hesitating, 'hiccupping' ever so slightly in mid-line, the magic flow momentarily arrested. I found the problem to be THE COMMA. There is a natural rhythm in these Haiku--are the commas necessary at all?
Glad you found your way to my blog, Clark. You ask a good question. I probably could do without the comma. I’m relatively new to the haiku form and what I have learned so far is that haiku in its original Japanese never has punctuation. The language has cutting words instead that are frequently used. In English, however, we have some limitations which sometimes require to replace those cutting words. I do not use it often, but sometimes I am just never sure! Thank you for a valuable comment!
 

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