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Black Hole (Original lyrics) WIP

Black Hole
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[Verse]
Lost and exhausted
In a void of despair
Crippled and drifting alone

Left in the darkness
Which eats at my soul
This chasm has become my home

[Bridge]
Nightmares abound
My heart beating faster
A knot in my stomach
Approaching disaster
At the speed of light
Convulsing in seizure
Sucked into the night
Screaming into the ether

[Chorus]
I
Am
Pulled
Apart
Twisted and strung out
Engulfed in the dark

You
Were
The last thing I saw
Perpetually falling
Into this black hole

My body
My heart
My mind
All broken

Death isn't coming
Fast enough

[Solo]

~~~~~~~

Dunno where to go from here. This shit is lit, though. The riff is vicious.

Comments

Cool lyrics, I would be interested in hearing the music behind it. I know it is not intended that way but I see this as a great spiritual piece, it could be the beginning of any form of Christian rock... The down side is that for some reason when someone gets faith in the Lord they loose all musical skill when it comes to writing kick ass songs.

To answer your question about, where do you go from here... you get the drift of what my answer would be :}

Bob
 
Plasticweld;bt13014 said:
Cool lyrics, I would be interested in hearing the music behind it. I know it is not intended that way but I see this as a great spiritual piece, it could be the beginning of any form of Christian rock... The down side is that for some reason when someone gets faith in the Lord they loose all musical skill when it comes to writing kick ass songs.

To answer your question about, where do you go from here... you get the drift of what my answer would be :}

Bob

I HATE CHRISTIAN MUSIC.

Ironically, my first heavy metal casette tape was Bloodgood, a Christian metal band from the 80s. =x

They were a good fucking band, too. Side 1 of their Detonation album is just so surprisingly satisfying.
 
I would also be interested in the song
completed. It has a spiritual element,
I hear a deeper meaning also.
 

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