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ash somers
March 23rd, 2008, 01:56 AM
CINQUAIN

The traditional cinquain is based on a syllable count, there's a few different ways to write them, so for ease of playing the game of cinquain, let's play ...

line 1 - 2 syllables
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 2 syllables

the next person uses the last line to begin again
they can be as simple or as complex
as you wish to make them
here's an example

2. home run
4. driving with force
6. last base is looking good
8. screaming & chanting the crowd cries
2. for more

the next person starts with 'for more' and so forth and so forth :)

ash somers
March 23rd, 2008, 01:57 AM
for more
never enough
hungry & ferocious
insatiable appetite kills
the mood

CodeRed
March 23rd, 2008, 06:39 AM
the mood
strikes me as strange
when I should feel happy
I only feel disconnected
from them

ash somers
March 23rd, 2008, 06:54 AM
:grin:

from them
all was taken
leaving nothing behind
broken souls, left under duress
starving

CodeRed
March 23rd, 2008, 01:54 PM
starving
pit-bulls is not
a good idea as
they can get angry enough to
bite you

:)

ash somers
March 24th, 2008, 02:17 AM
bite you
on the bottom
teeth as sharp as razors
quickly, run and hide before eye
catch you

CodeRed
March 24th, 2008, 07:09 AM
catch you
before you can
escape the warm oven
gingerbread man is not so fast
today

ash somers
March 24th, 2008, 09:05 AM
today
was rather hot
in the garden sweating
wiping brow between shoveling
horse shit

Modest Me
March 24th, 2008, 09:51 AM
horse sh*t
thats what love is
love was made to hurt us
to break our hearts and make us scream
then cry

ash somers
March 24th, 2008, 10:58 AM
then cry
crocodile tears
pretending you are sad
with salty wet streaks, streaming down
your face

CodeRed
March 24th, 2008, 12:03 PM
your face
is the skin of
everything that I touch
I hide beneath my memories
of you

ash somers
March 25th, 2008, 07:13 AM
of you
memories haunt
recesses of my mind
a tangled web of emotions
linger

CodeRed
March 26th, 2008, 12:31 AM
linger
don't want to leave
but the door is closing
and I lost the key years ago
somewhere

ash somers
March 27th, 2008, 05:12 AM
somewhere
there is sunshine
and some where there is rain
some where there is morning town, miles
away


edit: appropriated Judith Durham lyric.

The Backward OX
March 27th, 2008, 12:08 PM
That's plagiarism.
Judith wouldn't approve.


hmph

ash somers
March 27th, 2008, 11:01 PM
crikey, has anybody ever told you

you have more front than myers > ?


That's plagiarism.
Judith wouldn't approve.

hmph

judith
would be flattered
if she knew i used her
werds so eloquently in a
cinquian

The Backward OX
March 28th, 2008, 12:08 AM
I s’pose we must make allowances for Victorians.

It has to be confusing, living there, with the Yarra and all. Too thick to swim in, too thin to plough.


somewhere
there is sunshine
and some where there is rain
some where there is morning town, miles
away
away
in a manger
no crib for his bed the
little lord jesus lay down his
sweet head


Go on chook lady.

Start one with sweet head.

nananananana

ash somers
March 28th, 2008, 01:44 AM
sweet head
between her breasts
gently caressing theeeee
hearing her sounds of pulse & blood
pumping

ha, stick that in your pipe and smoke it > !

Avenue
March 29th, 2008, 04:34 AM
Pumping
blood for the bank;
saving the victims you'll
run down next week. For now here's a
cookie.

ash somers
March 29th, 2008, 05:37 AM
cookie
said the monster
stuffing them into his
blue furry muppet mouth with fists
flailing

Avenue
March 29th, 2008, 06:24 AM
Flailing,
like a writer
who has quickly run out
of syllables! What should I do?!
Hang on...

Modest Me
March 29th, 2008, 07:28 AM
hang on
it wont last long
life does have its valleys
but it also has its great peaks
just wait

perilperilperil
March 29th, 2008, 07:41 AM
Just wait,
Soon comes the mist.
First fire, screams, but then mist;
And in mist, we'll sleep and be safe,
My dear.


Eeuuuu, creepy.

Modest Me
March 29th, 2008, 07:44 AM
my dear
don't be upset
please try to understand
why we cannot be together
not now

Modest Me
March 29th, 2008, 08:04 AM
oops i skipped a line didnt i?
:oops:

ill fix that, lol

ash somers
March 29th, 2008, 12:21 PM
not now
time is precious
come back again later
perhaps i wont be so busy
werking

CodeRed
March 29th, 2008, 01:43 PM
working
with steady hand
creating something that
I can be proud of enough to
give you

ash somers
March 29th, 2008, 02:44 PM
give you
encouragement
firm wind beneath tired wings
carrying shared weight upon strong
shoulders

CodeRed
March 29th, 2008, 02:50 PM
shoulders
sagging beneath
the weight of the world, but
if only you knew it was just
a chip

ash somers
March 29th, 2008, 02:56 PM
a chip
a dint, a crack
rendered of defection
hidden second, oddment, remnant
buried

Avenue
March 29th, 2008, 04:28 PM
Buried
under years of
bread-winning; grave-dirt for
your boyhood dreams, your fantasies.
Old man.

silent-wish
March 29th, 2008, 08:23 PM
buried alive
in the ghostly graveyard
with her heart pounding
she banged her fist on the coffin
Suddenly

silent-wish
March 29th, 2008, 08:36 PM
damn i was too late oh well
ignore me

ash somers
March 29th, 2008, 11:38 PM
sure
no problemo
just a friendly reminder
we're playing a syllable count of

2
4
6
8
2

you were close ;)




4. buried alive
6. in the ghostly graveyard
5. with her heart pounding
8. she banged her fist on the coffin
3. Suddenly



keep trying

ash somers
March 30th, 2008, 12:03 AM
old man
suddenly died
general heart attack
the funeral is tomorrow
sadly

CodeRed
March 30th, 2008, 02:53 AM
sadly
I couldn't think
of anything to say
that was worthwhile to post in this
word game

Modest Me
March 30th, 2008, 03:35 AM
word game
you waste my time
keeping me from my list
i don't do anything these days
but you

CodeRed
March 30th, 2008, 04:29 AM
but you
never told me
why you decided to
change the rules of the game during
half-time

Modest Me
March 30th, 2008, 05:25 AM
half-time
thats what this is
in our game of dating
we're just halfway, we're not finished
rest up

Zorell
March 30th, 2008, 05:34 AM
rest up
the day begins
and will not wait on you
so, no laziness, movement
get up!

Modest Me
March 30th, 2008, 07:39 AM
get up
get off your knees
don't beg me for my love
you should know you already have
my heart

ash somers
March 30th, 2008, 10:32 AM
my heart
beating faster
my head all in a spin
giddy senses coursing thru my
body

CodeRed
March 30th, 2008, 01:58 PM
body
softly laid down
resting within the grasp
of one last lingering caress
from me

Zorell
March 30th, 2008, 06:49 PM
from me
to you, my heart
it is tru, but you don't
feel the same, why should I endure
the pain?

CodeRed
March 31st, 2008, 12:25 AM
The pain
is not enough
to keep me from trying
or to stop me from giving you
my love

ash somers
March 31st, 2008, 11:36 PM
my love
for you explodes
beyond the realm of now
expanding brightly every breath
we take

Modest Me
April 1st, 2008, 12:11 AM
we take
its our nature
but i dont remember
saying you could take my heart and
keep it

CodeRed
April 1st, 2008, 12:16 AM
keep it
if you want to
this heart was lost to me
already and I no longer
need it

Zorell
April 1st, 2008, 02:54 AM
need it
solice. from you
and your ways, they engulf
my heart, but leave it empty. save
my love

perilperilperil
April 1st, 2008, 06:42 AM
my love
drank up the night
a slowness, we drift down
and I wake to the yellow light
breathing

CodeRed
April 2nd, 2008, 01:01 AM
thank you
I do believe
the journey that we took
was worth me ending up so far
from home

Zorell
April 2nd, 2008, 02:23 AM
from home
I ran, and yet
at home I feel, so new
this thing you have given to me:
new sight

ash somers
April 2nd, 2008, 12:28 PM
new sight
with new glasses
twenty twenty vision
no more headaches, squinting behind
the screen

CodeRed
April 2nd, 2008, 02:18 PM
the screen
you stand behind
translucent rice-paper
I see your form by soft candle
glowing

ash somers
April 3rd, 2008, 03:32 AM
glowing
ever brighter
cacophony of lights
razzle dazzle, sunglasses on
shielding

perilperilperil
April 3rd, 2008, 05:44 AM
shielding
so overlooked
I offer you a place
to hide, yet off you go again
fighting

Zorell
April 5th, 2008, 01:36 AM
to cry
for joy at this
little life I watch grow
he was not born my bro but he
won't know

ash somers
April 5th, 2008, 02:36 AM
won't know
the whole outcome
until time ticks away
experience being the best
teacher

Zorell
April 5th, 2008, 02:40 AM
teacher
you gave so much
and let me know the stars
I can touch,was there if I fell
thank you

ash somers
April 5th, 2008, 02:46 AM
thank you
for now eye see
beyond limitations
open eyes begets open mind
soaring

Zorell
April 5th, 2008, 03:39 AM
thank you
for being you
and letting me do what it
is that I do, even if I can
teach you

ash somers
April 5th, 2008, 06:09 AM
teach you
how to count lass
a strict syllable count
is what we try to adhere to
playing

Zorell
April 5th, 2008, 06:12 AM
playing
by the rules
can be hard for me, I bet
I have more than just three errors
sorry

ash somers
April 5th, 2008, 06:18 AM
lol


sorry
for being such
a stickler for the rules
ingrained deeply from my childhood
relived

CodeRed
April 5th, 2008, 06:46 AM
relived
it was nothing
like it was once I knew
the truth behind every lie (that*)
you told


*I put 'that' in brackets - some people pronounce 'every' in three syllables, others two. :)

ash somers
April 5th, 2008, 10:03 AM
you told
me how you feel
an awkward moment, still
reciprocation, eager to
reply

perilperilperil
April 5th, 2008, 04:08 PM
reply
quickly before
I waste away the night
staring at my e-mail clicking
refresh

CodeRed
April 5th, 2008, 06:28 PM
refresh
my memory
for I can no longer
remember exactly what is
the point

Zorell
April 5th, 2008, 07:45 PM
the point
to our liveswe
may never know, perhaps
for the better, for if we did...
oh boy...

A Vaulter's Insanity
April 5th, 2008, 07:52 PM
Oh boy
this really sucks
How did it come to this
I though this was all just a game
Zorell!

Zorell
April 5th, 2008, 07:56 PM
Zorell
Is more unique
than the name that was to
me handed, my ideas will
roam free

A Vaulter's Insanity
April 5th, 2008, 08:00 PM
Roam free
Though all my dreams
Want me to be captured
To want nothing else but to see
her eyes

Zorell
April 5th, 2008, 08:04 PM
her eyes
like nets, held me
captured my heart, release
seems to escape me, but I want
to fall

A Vaulter's Insanity
April 5th, 2008, 08:12 PM
To fall
To not get up
To give up everything
Live with out knowing any success
Is death

Zorell
April 5th, 2008, 08:19 PM
Is death
truly the end?
Or were all the faiths true,
there is something after this...
What more?

A Vaulter's Insanity
April 5th, 2008, 08:31 PM
What more
Is there to this?
This game that we now play
This strange game where I write cinquains
that suck

Zorell
April 5th, 2008, 09:02 PM
that suck
oh the list could
go on forever of
those things we loathe, and people too
restraint

ash somers
April 6th, 2008, 02:34 AM
restraint
held back by chains
struggling for our freedom
thrashing, crashing, trying hard to
escape

CodeRed
April 6th, 2008, 04:32 PM
escape
this bare prison
of my own creation
running further from where I left
myself

ash somers
April 7th, 2008, 05:30 AM
myself
silly old goose
clipped wings detrimental
for flying sky high above the
heavens

CodeRed
April 9th, 2008, 09:21 AM
heavens
above, I am
at such a complete loss
as to how I can respond to
this one

ash somers
April 10th, 2008, 08:52 AM
this one
as opposed to
that one over there, see?
goodness gracious me, nothing but
a mess

CodeRed
April 10th, 2008, 10:32 AM
a mess
inside and out
unable to listen
thoughts screaming as silence becomes
louder

ash somers
April 10th, 2008, 11:31 AM
louder
i cant hear you
what was it that you said
chattering behind my back so
cheeky

CodeRed
April 12th, 2008, 04:05 AM
cheeky
I think that you
need a quick lesson taught
and I am just the person to
do it

ash somers
April 12th, 2008, 07:09 AM
do it
go on, i dare
you to try and stop me
from entering forbidden lands
laughing

Avenue
April 12th, 2008, 06:21 PM
Laughing,
like the wild child
hidden under your skin.
Business suits and brief cases won't
fool me.

Noirllyn
April 12th, 2008, 06:38 PM
Fool me
with your sinless
mouth? Your minty fresh breath
cannot be brushed teeth, but only
ICE CREAM!

CodeRed
April 12th, 2008, 07:18 PM
ice cream
melting over
sticky fingers holding
the cone with brazen, triumphant
pleasure

ash somers
April 13th, 2008, 12:22 AM
pleasure
button is on
push the pink pin, darling
join me in an afternoon's sweet
repose

ash somers
April 18th, 2008, 01:39 AM
repose
summer delight
fire flies flit from tree top
luminosity brighten shores
burning

CodeRed
April 18th, 2008, 11:43 AM
burning
faded letters
though still remembering
desires, the weight of forgotten
kisses

ash somers
April 19th, 2008, 03:28 AM
i'm impressed *nods seriously* although
it leaves me the unenviable task
of writing one for 'kisses' ...
romance has never
been my forte

;)

*puts on thinking cap*

CodeRed
April 19th, 2008, 03:35 AM
Thanks! (Poetry isn't mine, so I take that as high praise indeed :))

ash somers
April 19th, 2008, 03:39 AM
good ! ... okay, here we go

kisses
soft and sweetly
upon my cheek, you have
my undivided attention
lovely

see, hardly romantic

*chuckle*

CodeRed
April 19th, 2008, 03:58 AM
lovely
kisses come from
those we love, and the ones
that I cherish the most come from
my son

:)

ash somers
April 19th, 2008, 04:06 AM
:)

my son
times three for me
late nights & girls abound
the trials & tribulations, all
worth it

CodeRed
April 19th, 2008, 06:10 PM
worth it
in the end is
what they all say to me
why must I always find out the
hard way

ash somers
April 20th, 2008, 01:07 AM
hard way
of doing things
finding out after facts
smack us in the eyeballs, regret
follows

CodeRed
April 20th, 2008, 02:40 PM
follows
me silently
everywhere I go
always under foot, my creepy
shadow

ash somers
April 21st, 2008, 08:52 AM
shadow
leaping across
the eternal light house
of inspiration, damning those
who look

CodeRed
April 26th, 2008, 04:07 PM
who look
strange when you start
explaining halfway through
thoughts they didn't fathom in the
first place

(that was damn hard!)

ash somers
April 27th, 2008, 01:06 PM
so sorry 'bout that
although eye must say
you've made it look easy

:)

first place
awarded to
australia's favourite
dancer for 2008
is jack

yay, we love jack !

CodeRed
April 27th, 2008, 01:24 PM
so sorry 'bout that
although eye must say
you've made it look easy

:)


Why thankyou! :D

Is Jack
not the cutest
boy and greatest dancer
you've seen on television in
some time?

:cheers: Yay, Jack! :)

ash somers
April 28th, 2008, 01:59 PM
some time?
she asks as she
quickly packs her suitcase
and rushes out the door to catch
a train

CodeRed
April 29th, 2008, 12:25 AM
a train
of thoughts is fast
becoming so far out
of reach that even my name looks
foreign

ash somers
April 29th, 2008, 10:19 AM
foreign
entity shine
kaleidoscope of light
fascinating coloured abstract
objects

CodeRed
April 29th, 2008, 04:09 PM
objects
inanimate
wavering and moving
towards me, double-dosed on pain
killers

ash somers
May 3rd, 2008, 06:22 AM
killers
of a good time
stalwarts, sticks in the mud
no fucking fun at all, best to
ignore

CodeRed
May 4th, 2008, 09:09 AM
ignore
me after this
I don't understand why
it turned out the way it did but
you're gone

ash somers
May 4th, 2008, 10:21 AM
you're gone
from me now *sniff*
buried six foot under
a labyrinth of memories
linger

CodeRed
May 4th, 2008, 05:11 PM
linger
for a moment
just hover here with me
in a momentary promise
just once

ash somers
May 6th, 2008, 09:57 AM
just once
listen to the
sound of your subconscious
rattling skeletons in closets
haunting

CodeRed
May 6th, 2008, 04:16 PM
haunting
departed yet
hanging around, and still
keeping so many secrets from
the world

ash somers
May 7th, 2008, 06:18 AM
the world
is my oyster
served anyway you like
gobbled down whole, in a feeding
frenzy


lol

CodeRed
May 7th, 2008, 04:50 PM
lol - good one :)

frenzy
getting worked up
over nothing at all
and frustrating me with all the
nonsense

ash somers
May 9th, 2008, 06:22 AM
nonsense
don't believe you
tricky little scoundrel
conning with false facts; trying to
swindle

CodeRed
May 11th, 2008, 10:42 AM
swindle
those poor, hapless
people, so willing to
believe in quick soloutions to
problems

ash somers
May 12th, 2008, 09:28 AM
problems
multiply when
mistakes go unheeded;
declaring idiot savante
won't help

CodeRed
May 12th, 2008, 03:34 PM
won't help
I told you once
you can try if you want
but it's only going to waste
your time

ash somers
May 17th, 2008, 10:30 AM
your time
is running out
quickly count the seconds
watch minutes blinking by without
a sound

CodeRed
May 17th, 2008, 01:29 PM
a sound
any little noise
to indicate life is
still hanging on by a thread in
this place

:-\"

ash somers
May 20th, 2008, 09:15 AM
this place
reminiscent
of an undertakers
basement, filled with bodies; not one
moving

:scratch:

The Backward OX
May 20th, 2008, 09:40 AM
moving
my bowels is
a likely consequence
of reading too much more of this
rubbish [-X

ash somers
May 20th, 2008, 12:43 PM
rubbish
one man's trash, is
another man's treasure
seeing in the eye of the bee
holder

Zorell
May 23rd, 2008, 03:48 AM
holder
of my own love
lighter now because of
letting go of baggage I did
not want

ash somers
May 23rd, 2008, 10:27 AM
not want
or need a thing
catered for entirely
provisions all provided, so
waste not

ash somers
June 8th, 2008, 05:36 AM
okay, so i'll play with myself, it's not like i haven't before ...

waste not
a second more
upon such nonsense as
who is who in the fucking zoo
grow up

CodeRed
June 8th, 2008, 09:55 PM
okay, so i'll play with myself, it's not like i haven't before ...
Lol!8-[


grow up
maybe I should
not look at it with a
fourteen year old's humour, but it's
funny

:)

ash somers
June 9th, 2008, 12:16 AM
*clap* hooray, you're back yay :)


funny ?
make me laugh, please
tickle my tummy with
your sense of humour, bringing down
the house

i think i'll to come back to this one, i'm sure it's the werst one i've ever written lol

CodeRed
June 10th, 2008, 09:11 PM
I'm sure that I have far worse examples here, lol. :)

the house
warm and cosy
defeating winter with
pine scented fire, cheerful faces
glowing

ash somers
June 11th, 2008, 11:50 AM
glowing
orange embers
crackle when i poke them
toss another log on and warm
my soul

CodeRed
June 11th, 2008, 06:18 PM
my soul
a vagabond
running away from home
it took my heart and a bag of
peanuts

:)

ash somers
June 12th, 2008, 04:28 AM
peanuts
gather around
watching the gallery
careless condescending comments
abound

CodeRed
June 12th, 2008, 07:01 PM
abound
with limitless
possibilities, these
cinquain take any direction
you like

ash somers
June 12th, 2008, 07:21 PM
you like
pretty flowers
nestled in the window
wafting sweetness under your nose
fragrant

CodeRed
June 14th, 2008, 01:53 PM
fragrant
the scent drifts on
cool night air, sweet jasmine
travelling over the garden
wildly

SoNickSays...
June 16th, 2008, 09:38 PM
Wildy
Hearts yearn for more
More attention from them
Girls that pull your soul with a glance
Teasing

CodeRed
June 17th, 2008, 01:42 AM
Teasing
Bedroom eyes close
and momentarily
conceal a furtive gaze, full of
desire

ash somers
June 17th, 2008, 06:50 AM
*whistle* that's hot

ash somers
June 17th, 2008, 06:58 AM
desire
yes, i want you
between white satin sheets
doing things unspeakable, our
secret

SoNickSays...
June 17th, 2008, 06:30 PM
Secret
I'll tell you mine
But you must tell me yours
Secrets to be held forever
Promise.

ash somers
June 18th, 2008, 06:31 AM
promise
a pledge given
from one to another
werds laid down with a specific
meaning

CodeRed
June 18th, 2008, 08:12 AM
meaning
and intention.
I'm never really sure
if they're the same thing when he speaks
to me

SoNickSays...
June 18th, 2008, 09:36 AM
To me
They are the same
Just background images
Paying you no attention
Not even looking.

ash somers
June 18th, 2008, 10:42 AM
looking
out the window
not long until it snows
life hibernates - silent and still
sleeping

SoNickSays...
June 18th, 2008, 03:46 PM
Sleeping
Slow and heavy breaths
Watching her at my side
God, she's beautiful
She's the one.

ash somers
June 19th, 2008, 03:56 AM
nick, you're doing a fabulous job, so i hope you're not put off by me mentioning, cinquain is written to a strict syllable count of ...

1st line = 2 syllables
2nd line = 4 syllables
3rd line = 6 syllables
4th line = 8 syllables
5th line = 2 syllables




Sleeping (2)
Slow and heavy breaths (5)
Watching her at my side (6)
God, she's beautiful (5)
She's the one. (3)



maybe you could try again :)

SoNickSays...
June 19th, 2008, 05:33 PM
Ah... I'm afraid I read the syllable count on the OP incorrect.


line 1 - 2 syllables
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 2 syllables

I read this like Line 1 has to have 2-4 syllables, and line 2 has to have 3-6 syllables etc.

I apologize. I must remember to read the description carefully. This habit had cost me quite a few points in numerous tests when at school.

I'll try again:

Sleeping
Slow, steady breaths
Watching her a my side
A smile frozen on her lips
Beauty

CodeRed
June 20th, 2008, 06:07 PM
Beauty
perfectly formed.
Sighs mist the window as
a lonely watcher imagines
secrets

ash somers
June 21st, 2008, 06:39 AM
secrets
left unspoken
between us both, a look
a glance, a nod, a whisper of
knowing

SoNickSays...
June 21st, 2008, 10:26 AM
Knowing
What your thinking
A feat I cannot do
I try so hard to be the one
you want.

ash somers
June 21st, 2008, 10:58 AM
you want
me to see you
so i promise to give
my undivided attention
watching

SoNickSays...
June 22nd, 2008, 10:47 AM
Watching
From far up high
Bustling people below
One destination on their minds
City

ash somers
June 23rd, 2008, 08:34 AM
city
hustle bustle
folks rushing hitherto
honking horns, flashing neon lights
siren

SoNickSays...
June 23rd, 2008, 07:04 PM
Siren.
God, they've caught me!
They're gaining too much speed!
The strong bumper hitting my back...
Caught...

(Very bad, sorry :()

ash somers
June 24th, 2008, 10:40 AM
weeeeell, it's not too bad, i spose... *blink*

although i've had to improvise the last line


i'm caught
betwixt - between
ensnared by werds spoken
formulating bold conjunctions
to trap

CodeRed
June 24th, 2008, 04:00 PM
to trap -
the hunter waits,
suspended on gleaming
translucent threads, a delicate
danger

ash somers
June 26th, 2008, 10:01 PM
danger
danger, danger
batten down the hatches
southwesterlys are ripping off
the roof

AA
June 26th, 2008, 11:06 PM
the roof
held by grey slabs
try worshiping the clock
imagination, bring me home
away

ash somers
June 26th, 2008, 11:32 PM
:)

away
beyond the ken
of mortal men, flying
skyward, ever upward, flights of
fancy

AA
June 26th, 2008, 11:46 PM
fancy
teacups, china
face my ugly pretense
swallow facades, please my people
collapse

ash somers
June 26th, 2008, 11:52 PM
collapse
quick, C.P.R. !
pulse? breath? - resuscitate
"hold on you bastard, don't let go"
breathing




ha, sorry, i got a bit carried away *chuckle*

AA
June 27th, 2008, 12:10 AM
breathing
passage to life
life's juice. wet. crisp. exact.
channel into divinity
fresh air

ash somers
June 27th, 2008, 12:18 AM
fresh air ?
understatement !
outside is freezing, brrrrrr
inside feeding fire and drinking
coffee

AA
June 27th, 2008, 10:40 PM
coffee
crack the crimson
lips with cream kettled fire
drink to heat your weakened body
and live

ash somers
June 28th, 2008, 10:37 AM
and live
for the moment;
give up chasing dragons.
the here and now providing us
more joy

zeplin10
July 3rd, 2008, 08:05 PM
"MORE JOY!"
they cried, the crowd
beneath her window, while
inside Joy yawned, and put her robe
back on.

ash somers
July 4th, 2008, 11:44 AM
back on ?
the lights are out !
two fallen trees destroy
power lines flapping in the breeze
look out !

zeplin10
July 4th, 2008, 04:59 PM
"LOOK OUT!!!"
they cried, the crowd
beneath her window, while
inside she turned the hummer switch
back on.

ash somers
July 5th, 2008, 02:50 AM
right, then

back on
rafferty rules
rumble in the jungle
get your rocks off playing werd games
sicko !

zeplin10
July 5th, 2008, 04:48 AM
"Sicko!"
is all the note
from Tommy's mom said. She
didn't "like much English." She was
Purr-shun.

ash somers
July 5th, 2008, 06:40 AM
purr-shun
the evil beast
slathering down the door
leaving tell tale signs of their dark
presence

zeplin10
July 5th, 2008, 06:50 AM
"PRESENCE!!!"
Jimmy cried. "I
love Christmas because I
love all the presence -- like that doll
with boobs."

ash somers
July 5th, 2008, 06:52 AM
with boobs
protruding from
her skimpy latex top
she bent over in front of him
shocking

zeplin10
July 5th, 2008, 07:46 AM
"Shocking,
Officer Jones,
my eyes still hurt from it.
To see such boobalaciousness --
in church!!!!"

ash somers
July 5th, 2008, 11:09 AM
in church
we praise the lord
whilst Father Feelin is
up to no good behind the wood
altar

zeplin10
July 5th, 2008, 03:43 PM
"altar
ego" refers
to what goes on inside
the heads of hardened guys of good
intent

ash somers
July 6th, 2008, 06:47 AM
intent
our will to do
it's what goes on inside
our tiny little brains - becomes
action

zeplin10
July 6th, 2008, 04:48 PM
action
figures, like Troy
and Helen, embody
mankind's most profound achievements
as dolls.

ash somers
July 7th, 2008, 09:01 AM
as dolls
masquerading
pretending they're human
scary little fuckers always
grinning

CodeRed
August 22nd, 2008, 09:58 AM
grinning
and with a wink
I jump down from the fence
and with a just a sly glance, beckon
"follow"

ash somers
August 22nd, 2008, 11:55 AM
"follow!"
cried the piper
playing a merry tune
upon his pied pipe of wind and
whistles

Blue Shades
August 24th, 2008, 02:47 PM
Whistles
have run away
to an unknown destiny
looking for a glorious and miraculous
sound

ash somers
August 25th, 2008, 10:31 AM
welcome aboard the cinquain thread, blue shades :)
the last line is actually a two syllable count
so i'll just improvise for a bit ...

sounding
louder ! louder !
blowing out my ear drums
wont make any difference cos
i'm deaf

just a friendly reminder about the syllable count for each line:

2
4
6
8
2

but you can break the rules, i don't mind ;)

Blue Shades
August 25th, 2008, 02:20 PM
Thanks for the reminder Ash :-)

I'm deaf
There is no shame
Who needs to hear the song
of an unfair, toneless, bitter
living

scnd
August 25th, 2008, 04:53 PM
living
twenty years old
understand it's not all
striving for tomorrow's lifestyle
live now

Roheer
August 25th, 2008, 06:07 PM
live now
it's all you have
life can be so empty
when you can't find your true purpose
move on

ash somers
August 26th, 2008, 12:26 AM
oh goodie, more people, how exciting !

move on
to another
place in this time & space
endings become our beginnings
timeless

Blue Shades
August 27th, 2008, 06:45 PM
timeless
happiness for
a little matches girl
who was sent by cold night to
Heaven

Linton Robinson
August 27th, 2008, 08:16 PM
Somewhere
you wait, I know
past all dirt and dreams
beyond the dust of dreary days:
your eyes

ash somers
August 27th, 2008, 11:53 PM
your eyes
are like magnets
bringing me closer to
the centre of your burning soul
magic

Blue Shades
August 31st, 2008, 04:48 PM
magic
is not merely
magic wands and some spells
it is the brightest concepet of
your love

ash somers
September 8th, 2008, 11:07 AM
your love
buried beneath
a mountain of sadness
uncovered only by constant
digging

Zensati
September 9th, 2008, 03:50 AM
Diggin
All your beauty
I stare at your sweet face
And you turn away in shyness
my girl

Linton Robinson
September 9th, 2008, 04:11 AM
my girl
is super hot
your girl ain't diddly squat
my girl hotter than hot hot hot
yours not

Zensati
September 9th, 2008, 04:21 AM
Yours not
She not that hot
I think you smokin pott
Your girl look like a dump of snot.
Whats up?

ash somers
September 9th, 2008, 09:58 AM
what's up?
with these cinquain
werds strewn across the page
playing ping pong back and forth, lift
your game

ash somers
September 10th, 2008, 11:09 AM
your game
is transparent
you think i cannot see
ha, blinded by such arrogance
tragic

Blue Shades
September 12th, 2008, 09:33 AM
tragic
words and phrases
complete the ruthless shape
of your indescribable life
story

ash somers
September 13th, 2008, 10:13 AM
story
drawn on a board
ideas flow like wine
a bit messy & pissy but
good fun

Blue Shades
September 26th, 2008, 08:59 AM
good fun
is sometimes missed
when tragedy begins
to erase all the smiles and
laughter

ash somers
October 15th, 2008, 11:06 AM
laughter
resounding up
into the ethers, sharp
high pitched shrill cackle, splits open
the air

Blue Shades
November 9th, 2008, 05:52 PM
The air
Is it endless
like our life miseries
which remind us that we once were
happy

ash somers
November 11th, 2008, 09:08 AM
happy
little chappy
a dancing hitherto
be joyful, life's a circus, can't
you see ?

ash somers
January 21st, 2009, 09:54 PM
you see ?
i thought you blind
a fine pair we would make
hearing and seeing no bloody
evil

Olly Buckle
June 1st, 2009, 11:01 PM
Evil
everywhere
Unsaid , unheard, unseen
Drifting in and out of my head.
Peace man

ash somers
June 2nd, 2009, 09:37 AM
hi olly, good to see you here :)

peace man
fly the white flag
surrender unto calm
relinquish violent notions
be still

Olly Buckle
June 3rd, 2009, 01:08 AM
Be still
And show your will
Do not join with factions,
Practice pacifist inaction,
Teach, learn

ash somers
June 3rd, 2009, 09:03 AM
teach, learn
knowledge passing
back & forth, between brains
sacramental synaptic-clefts
firing

Dayshayde
June 3rd, 2009, 09:10 AM
firing
repetitively
ensuing violence
never ending the dream it seems
lost there

ash somers
June 3rd, 2009, 09:15 AM
lost there
amongst rubble
ruins left uncared for
rubbish being another man's
treasure

Dayshayde
June 3rd, 2009, 09:21 AM
treasure
a man's true soul
his integrity found
his virtues held solid forever
trusted

ash somers
June 3rd, 2009, 01:02 PM
trusted
dependable
relied upon for werd
faithfully following footsteps
likewise

Dayshayde
June 3rd, 2009, 01:11 PM
likewise
acquainted sure
meeting along the lines
the lines of unspoken words true
greetings

ash somers
June 3rd, 2009, 01:14 PM
greetings
fellow earthling
come shake my hand hello
dispensing with such pleasantries
charming

Dayshayde
June 3rd, 2009, 01:16 PM
charming
of course i am
courtesy unabashed
egotistically confusing
i know

ash somers
June 3rd, 2009, 01:18 PM
lol

i know
of just one thing
bending between the rules
is often more fun than being
correct

Dayshayde
June 3rd, 2009, 01:27 PM
correct
endless boredom
class is out have some fun
lounge around like a lazy bum
relax

Olly Buckle
June 3rd, 2009, 11:47 PM
Relax
The bangs of curls
Of tight girly girl's wavy whirls
Wash, clean away their make up faces.
Disgraces.

Dayshayde
June 4th, 2009, 12:22 AM
Disgrace
Slapped in the face
tormented extremly
lost forever in waves of shame
Sailing

Olly Buckle
June 4th, 2009, 08:01 AM
Sailing
Shape, direction
Power forward motion,
Effortlessly using the wind
And sea.

Eluixa
June 4th, 2009, 08:41 AM
And sea
between her toes
Soft with sand slithering,
sinking heels, delighted squeels peal
with joy

ash somers
June 4th, 2009, 01:31 PM
with joy
and merriment
birthday celebrations
party hard until the breaking
of dawn

The Wrong Writer
June 4th, 2009, 05:11 PM
You know
whatever else
the time will never come
when anything you say
means dick

ash somers
June 5th, 2009, 06:42 AM
means dick
the one you are
cums easy to you ... no?
when fools open their mouths expect
failure

oh, by the way, the 2nd last line is 8 syllables, not 6

Dayshayde
June 5th, 2009, 03:18 PM
failure
misfire misled
lost in the truth of scheme
tossed like a salad enduring
fate

The Wrong Writer
June 5th, 2009, 04:14 PM
failure
is like when one
counts syllables instead
of reading what is there
to see

The Wrong Writer
June 5th, 2009, 04:19 PM
A few didactic notes

Cinquain - Lesson Plans (http://www.readinga-z.com/poetry/lesson_plans/cinquain/cinquain_print.html)

Cinquain - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cinquain)

Poetic Form: Cinquain - Poets.org - Poetry, Poems, Bios & More (http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/5775)

Operant concepts: flexibility and openess of mind. One of the actual goals of poetry. Enjoy

ash somers
June 5th, 2009, 09:09 PM
fated
to see the holes
magnified in crumpets
joining the dots reveals a mouth
gaping

Olly Buckle
June 7th, 2009, 12:28 PM
Gaping
Mighty Moloch
Consumer of men's souls.
Destroying kings and emperors,
Death comes.

Foxee
June 7th, 2009, 12:37 PM
Death comes
on silent feet
to everyone at last
wary of no human being
bold fate.

ash somers
June 8th, 2009, 12:53 AM
bold fate
destined hardship
toughens a man's resolve
to grin and bare a difficult
pathway

Foxee
June 8th, 2009, 03:03 AM
Pathway
higher calling
courageous loneliness
mysteries of the universe
destined

ash somers
June 8th, 2009, 11:54 AM
mmhmm, nice one foxee :)

destined
for greater things
a latent cocooning
metamorphosis awakens
brilliance

Olly Buckle
June 8th, 2009, 11:18 PM
bold fate
destined hardship
toughens a man's resolve
to grin and bare a difficult
pathway

Bear?

Brilliance
Reflected faces
One stone of many angles
One light split to many refractions
Diamond.

MTMarshall
June 8th, 2009, 11:31 PM
Away
from this place I so disdain
A humble life is all that remains
Once I remove all the
stains

Foxee
June 8th, 2009, 11:49 PM
Uh oh! MTMarshall broke de rules of de thread. Supposed to have started with 'Diamond' which was the last word of Olly's contribution (the post right before yours).

So I'll start with Diamond and this one goes out to all the June brides...


Diamond
carbon's bright heart
refracting joyful light
forever captured on her hand
it's June

MTMarshall
June 8th, 2009, 11:54 PM
Sorry for the error....If I had know the last word I would have used it The last word I saw when writing was "AWAY".. As far as rules....Creativity has no bounds and therefore no set rules ......for those that follow blindly there is no place to go......Merely endless circles going nowhere...Fire would never have been nor the wheel... Forget indoor plumbing....Mankind gave it up for over 100 years after Rome fell.....As far as games go I'm not very good at them and I'm not big on rules.....I shall play no more.....As this really is a bore and I was simply taking a break from writing in the first place.... I need to go back to what I do and mind my own business.......

Foxee
June 9th, 2009, 12:31 AM
Whoa now...it's just that this is a word game as much as poetry so the creator of the thread set the rules of the game and therefore the poetry, that's all. Your creativity is certainly not curtailed in your own threads. I invite you to read the first post of this thread and you'll see.

ash somers
June 9th, 2009, 08:56 AM
Bear?


arhar yes, i think you have me olly
i didn't realise, i just assumed, naughty !
altho, i suppose one could always grin & bare it
if they so wished *chuckles* thanks for the correction

:)

ash somers
June 9th, 2009, 09:03 AM
Sorry for the error....If I had know the last word I would have used it The last word I saw when writing was "AWAY".. As far as rules....Creativity has no bounds and therefore no set rules ......for those that follow blindly there is no place to go......Merely endless circles going nowhere...Fire would never have been nor the wheel... Forget indoor plumbing....Mankind gave it up for over 100 years after Rome fell.....As far as games go I'm not very good at them and I'm not big on rules.....I shall play no more.....As this really is a bore and I was simply taking a break from writing in the first place.... I need to go back to what I do and mind my own business.......

that's a shame, you're most welcome to participate
this cinquain thread is a syllable counting exercise
to help strengthen word choice and placement
i'm sorry you see no value, see ya 'round :)

ash somers
June 9th, 2009, 09:06 AM
Language Warning

it's june
fucking freezing
rain, hail, sleet, snow and ice.
deliver me back to summer
please god

Foxee
June 9th, 2009, 01:12 PM
please God
heaven's laughter
suffer fools and writers
if I should die before I wake
free me

ash somers
June 12th, 2009, 11:18 PM
free me
from hands grasping
at time, as seconds tick
away the hours, days and nights
fly by

Olly Buckle
June 12th, 2009, 11:24 PM
Free me,
This can not beOnly I find my freedom
Liberation is personal
Mine alone

Olly Buckle
June 12th, 2009, 11:25 PM
It had to happen sooner or later, are you on early or am I on late? About 11.25 pm here.

ash somers
June 12th, 2009, 11:33 PM
both i think :) just after 8.30am here

ash somers
June 12th, 2009, 11:44 PM
fly by
with mine, alone
wings blackened by the sun
ambitious manoeuvre leaves me
for dead

Olly Buckle
June 13th, 2009, 07:39 AM
For dead
Shall resurrect,
According to scripture,
At the final judgement day
Gruesome.