First attempt at a Screenplay - Maryam

[eMb]

http://steven.gudio.com/Maryam%20Screenplay.doc

Tried to follow format best I could.

I needa bit of help; is there enough anticipation regarding the arrival of Maryam? I'm trying to make the plot twist as powerful as possible.

[mammamaia]

sorry, but most of us don't go elsewhere to read material... you can't post an entire script here, but you can post your opening scene, if you want some feedback on it...

i help/mentor lots of aspiring screenwriters, so you can email me for a critical read, help, or whatever, if you want... i can also send you a format guide and tips from the pros on various aspects of the craft, as well as a 'tools of the trade' list...

love and hugs, maia
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