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ArrowInTheBowOfTheLord
June 18th, 2018, 03:21 AM
moved to Prose Writer's Workshop (https://www.writingforums.com/threads/178740-The-Prophet-(working-title)-language-warning?p=2167420#post2167420)

SueC
June 18th, 2018, 04:11 PM
Oh my stars, Arrow. Tears this morning. You know, I have seen countless movies and sitcoms and what have you, books even, where the idea of a man (who might be God appearing in front of us, they say) does and says things like what you have written, and they never seem to work. We love the idea, though. Some poor broken down guy - and we know who it really is, or we eventually do. Joan Osborne with that song, "One of Us." Right?

What if God was one of us?
Just a slob like one of us
Just a stranger on the bus
Tryin' to make his way home...

Anyway, Arrow, you could not have cut anything from this. This was a wonderful read. You captured the pain, the longing and even the fatigue so well. I have no suggestions. Really good job ... and thank you.

undead_av
July 13th, 2018, 05:36 AM
I also cried while reading this, especially being a girl who's struggled with womanhood and stuff...it's just written so beautifully. 11/10