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MrTickle
December 23rd, 2016, 02:43 PM
This is a prose poem I wrote. I wasn't sure which section to stick it in - General Fiction or Poetry. But it's more prose than poetry I guess. Enjoy! Or at least try to!



The Demon Dance
is the idea of a better life
proposed to an unhappy spouse,
‘Kill him and live without constraints’.

The Demon Dance
is the thought of sex
with a married person.

The Demon Dance
is destruction
of an artist’s dream,
‘Your abstract painting,
that looks like clown puke’.

The Demon Dance
is a Chinese whisper.

The Demon Dances
when he’s stood at the podium
knowing he’s cheated and lied
to gain top prize.

DruidPeter
December 25th, 2016, 04:09 AM
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MrTickle
December 25th, 2016, 09:28 AM
I appreciate your well thought out response to prose and poetry. Thank you!

DruidPeter
December 26th, 2016, 02:29 PM
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MrTickle
December 27th, 2016, 01:29 AM
No problem mate, I enjoyed reading what you had to say anyway!

Bard_Daniel
December 28th, 2016, 03:39 AM
I found it interesting Mr Tickle but I would say, personally, that it falls more under the category of poetry than it does prose. This is just my opinion though.

"...clown puke" seemed a bit off to me however. Maybe it was meant to jolt me. If it did then I would say keep it.

MrTickle
December 28th, 2016, 12:46 PM
Thanks danielstj! I suppose it is slightly more poetry than prose.

Ell337
December 30th, 2016, 03:32 PM
I thought 'clown puke' was an excellent and graphic image and certainly resonates with me as a pithy comment on some forms of modern art. Although I do use the term 'art' loosely in this context.

MrTickle
December 31st, 2016, 08:01 PM
Thanks ell337!

Firemajic
December 31st, 2016, 08:29 PM
This is a prose poem I wrote. I wasn't sure which section to stick it in - General Fiction or Poetry. But it's more prose than poetry I guess. Enjoy! Or at least try to!



The Demon Dance
is the idea of a better life
proposed to an unhappy spouse,
‘Kill him and live without constraints’.

The Demon Dance
is the thought of sex
with a married person.

The Demon Dance
is destruction
of an artist’s dream,
‘Your abstract painting,
that looks like clown puke’.

The Demon Dance
is a Chinese whisper. ** Love this!!!! ;) the bones of a fabulous, dark poem...

The Demon Dances
when he’s stood at the podium
knowing he’s cheated and lied
to gain top prize.



Ok, Hello, Mr. T.... You did a lot of "telling".... well, actually, describing what the devil is ...each description is without a doubt intriguing, and with your creativity, could be fabulous, if you turned your imagination on and let it fly...
As presented, it is confusing and unsatisfying... like foreplay that fizzles out... not good... right? ;)