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Olly Buckle
June 24th, 2016, 02:22 PM
Pennants, flags, chivalry, daring and bravado did not win the day. The peasant stripping armour was troubled by a buzzing fly; the fly was troubled by the peasant, but in the end both got what they wanted. The peasant had the King’s helm and the fly laid fifty eggs in the corner of the King’s eye.

20oz
June 27th, 2016, 08:20 PM
Wow. Now that's very digestible and strong in imagery.

Bard_Daniel
June 27th, 2016, 09:19 PM
Great stuff Olly! Your first sentence really brought it out for me and the last one felt crisp and fitting.

I like it!

Olly Buckle
July 5th, 2016, 04:03 PM
Sorry, missed the comments, thank you so much folks.

escorial
July 5th, 2016, 04:15 PM
enjoyed..cool stuff

Makili
July 15th, 2016, 08:33 PM
This is the sort of stuff I love - it's like calligraphy or haiku - something simple and yet, full of meaning. So much story packed into just a few sentences. You said a lot, and yet left so much to the reader's imagination.

Olly Buckle
July 15th, 2016, 09:09 PM
thank you.

NashNash
July 17th, 2016, 03:22 PM
Powerful imagery and provokes your imagination! I liked it!

shivanib
July 17th, 2016, 10:18 PM
Hah, really well done. Another!

Olly Buckle
July 17th, 2016, 10:52 PM
Hah, really well done. Another!
Thanks, quick is not always easy, no room for fudges, but I will think about it, if only because this has such a good reception.

DATo
July 27th, 2016, 07:11 AM
Now this is what I'd call FLASH-flash fiction.

Yes, very short, but powerful. It not only tells a story employing brilliant imagery but also leaves one with a few philosophical thoughts to ponder.

Well done!

Olly Buckle
July 29th, 2016, 11:56 PM
Thank you.

Saul Bee
August 10th, 2016, 08:50 PM
Nicely done, really liked this. Every word counts.