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InkwellMachine
June 9th, 2016, 03:59 AM
Extreeemely nervous about how this one is going to be received. Very touchy subject matter in there for some. I think the writing is... okay, though? I don't know. Hit me with that criticism. I'm ready. <3


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Otj8coEFmmw

PrinzeCharming
June 11th, 2016, 05:17 AM
I had a glimpse of this the other day. I enjoyed the music playing. When I have time, I will definitely respond with specific critiques. Overall, I am going to judge from what I hear. Despite the monotone, the articulation is clear. The story has nice vivid imagery of the circus. I admire the word choices used to introduce your story. I love the sound effects, like the sheep, to flow with the story. Monique's character is admirable. I am pleased to see the dress move on the woman standing on the high wire. In addition, the interactive robot was great as well. It's a nice touch.

Thanks for sharing! Great job.