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Kevin
April 30th, 2015, 05:48 AM
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You ain’t no Goser.

No sir, he ain’t no Go-sir.

How do you know? What do you know?

We know you ain’t no Goser; not a drop!

Just leave him alone. Let him talk. Let him say his little say.

I’m sick of it, always preaching…

I don’t preach—I just tell it like it is.

Like it was, you mean.

And it’s all gone, now, so why...

Yeah, so why keep bringing it up?

Yeah, it’s not like it matters.

It does matter, and I talk about it because no one else does.

They’re all gone, and nobody cares.

You’re right, nobody except me. That’s why—so maybe someone will care.

They were here, so what? We’re here now, and they’re gone. Boo hoo…

Cause it’s important. You should know about what was done, what we did…

We didn’t do nuthin…

But you would’ve.

How do you know?

And what do you want us to do, give it back?

Yeah, it’s a little late for that.

Yeah, you’re right... it’s a little too late.

So then what?

Shouldn’t a took it.

Shouldn’t a took what?

All of it. Shouldn’t a took all of it.

Pfft...

Yeah, someone get me a beer.

LeeC
April 30th, 2015, 02:37 PM
To me your varying innovative techniques and subject matter range from intriguing to confusing. This one in its open ended simplicity leaves the door open to most any reader saying "yeah," while capturing the human subjective.

escorial
May 17th, 2015, 12:59 PM
To me your varying innovative techniques and subject matter range from intriguing to confusing. This one in its open ended simplicity leaves the door open to most any reader saying "yeah," while capturing the human subjective.

totally concur...Kevin is the master at ambiguity for me

Bevo
May 17th, 2015, 05:33 PM
Confusing at first but caught on, I like the conversation method, will try something like that in my writing.

Abita
May 18th, 2015, 03:33 AM
I really enjoyed this, and I'm all for ambiguity. But I would have preferred a little something (maybe even just a line or two) that alluded more directly to the event or the ramifications. You don't have to explain everything, but just provide a bit more of a guide on what actually took place, or who the speakers are, etc.

Just my two cents :)