DJ2334
October 16th, 2014, 06:37 AM
This is my first time writing in a while, so I would love some criticism. I'm aware that I do transition between past tense and present tense a lot, so if any of you have advice on how I could fix that then I would love it! Also, as you can see it's a first person narrative that I'm trying to make mainly present tense, but feel that it's necessary to make it past tense sometimes. And if you have any advice on how I could word my sentences better is they sound odd to you then I would love examples on that as well. Again, this is my first time writing in a long time and I haven't written much yet. I'm just mainly concerned with making edits at the moment and still debating on whether I should turn it into a third person past tense instead. __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ ________
EDIT: Format messed up. Will post soon
EDIT: Format messed up. Will post soon