View Full Version : Follow Me Home to La Paz - 875w

April 27th, 2014, 06:22 PM

April 28th, 2014, 03:40 AM
I had to let this story sink in for a bit before I could critique. I'm not going to lie, I found it confusing, but as I read further and further, I found that it didn't matter if I was confused, it was too intriguing to stop reading. Like most of your work, your descriptions read so well that the reader overlooks questions that pop into their mind about the work and just read it. It is very easy to get lost in this piece.

Mr mitchell
April 28th, 2014, 09:42 PM
Hello Rob, this is just great. Such a great voice, so believable; like with a character like that(even any character whom is the narrator in first person) is who should have a voice. Very likable. I must say that it's the most enjoyable piece I have read on here.

I'm sorry I haven't been on here much, but here I am.

Mr M

April 28th, 2014, 10:59 PM
kilroy - I live to confuse you. Seriously though, thanks for taking the time to read it. It's rough-drafty, but weird and quirky which I think are somewhat redeeming. Thanks for the compliment.

MM - Glad this thing worked so well for you! I really appreciate the kind words, man. :)