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CraniumInsanium
April 4th, 2013, 08:05 PM
Thanks for everyone's feedback :)

Hunter56
April 5th, 2013, 12:30 AM
Dude... I'm from the Eastern Shore of Maryland! I would've never thought someone would use this place as a setting lol.

Anyways, good start. The suspense is building up. Keep at it!

CraniumInsanium
April 5th, 2013, 01:20 AM
Im in howard county so I'm sure you're used to being flooded with tourists lol. I haven't done it myself since I was a kid however. I figured a family taking a beach vacation turned horror story might make a good setting lol.

This was intended as a short story, so I'm not sure if I should leave it as a cliffhanger or build it up more. What do you think? Cliffhanger as it is good? Or keep developing it some for a resounding crescendo of a finale? Originally I had it going some more, but as of now I don't know if its good keeping the reader wondering and in the dark...

Hunter56
April 5th, 2013, 03:18 AM
I'm in a very rural part of the area. The only tourists we really get are the ones on the way to Ocean City.

If you're not planning on a sequel, then I'd say give the story a little bit more closure. At least show what happened to the girl, and the aftermath of it. Just my opinion though.

Bandage
April 5th, 2013, 05:33 AM
Dude, I'm from Baltimore County. Thats awesome