Spiderrider89
February 14th, 2013, 08:40 AM
First story on here, any criticism helps!
"It's difficult to understand how life works Mindy. Sometimes decisions can seem very simple, but other times impossible. It's all just a matter of mindset, motivation, and preparation." said the grey headed man to his black haired granddaughter. Six year old Mindy's little green eyes, examined her grandpa's face, wondering why everyone had been so sad and visiting him so much lately. "Grandpa, will you go outside and play with me?" she said as she gripped her doll. "I would love to, but I can't leave this bed dear. Also,-" he was cut short by a tall, thin blonde headed woman's heels clicking as she entered the room. "Mindy dear, leave your grandfather alone. He needs to rest". The old man couldn't make out the woman's face because of his aged eyes, but knew her by her voice. "Mindy's not bothering me Sarah, I'm enjoying her company,".
"Dad, you're exhausted. You need to go to sleep!.... Honestly, I think this whole situation is insane- let us heal you!" she said placing her hands on her hips. Mindy pulls out a band-aid from her pocket, and places it on her grandpa's arm "all better grandpa!" He smiles but Sarah's face wasn't happy, and she walks over and kneels down in front of Mindy, who is now facing her mother's blue eyes. "Sweetie, why don't you go play with your brother." Mindy gripped her doll tight, "But brother is mean, and I want to help grandpa!" she said, looking away to avoid eye contact and puffs her little red cheeks in frustration. "GO!" said Sarah, and points towards the door. Mindy turns and hugs her grandfathers arm, and then runs out of the room.
"Why are you mean to her Sarah-bear?" said the old man as his grey, useless eyes searched for a silhouette of his daughter. "Dad, I'm well into my years. Please, do-not call me that anymore, it's degrading." said Sarah as she pulled the band-aid off of his arm. "Please, let us take you to the healer!" she continued as she placed a hand on his head, to check his temperature. "I'm sorry dear, but you know I don't want that," said the old man, as he closed his eyes. "It's not always about what you want, you have a family that needs you," said Sarah in a motherly and stern tone. "I have lived for well over five-hundred years. I have seen things and experienced more than a person should. It's my time dear, plus Chris is tired of waiting for me on the other side. He wants to pass through the gates of Bliss together, and you know how long he has been waiting."
"Dad, you can talk to Chris when-ever you want! His spirit is still in the Occulim of Light, which you can travel to when ever you want too." Said Sarah, still in a stern tone. "That's not the point!" he said, quickly and coughing and covering his mouth. Once he finished he removed his hand, and blood covered it. "You can make all of this go away, and stay here with us for-ever!" she said, but his face was now annoyed. "Please leave dear, but before you go know this. Just because we can heal ourselves, when-ever we want- that doesn't mean we should. Everything that is born must die, otherwise the world would be over-run!" Sarah tried to interject but the old man continued. "You are my daughter, and never once did we let the fact you where adopted interfere with you inheriting my power once I die. However, once you take in my power- you will also be passing it on to your children Mindy and Jake, because they are of blood realation to you. You know well the balancing act it takes to remain alive, considering you are in your two-hundreds and look like you're twenty-six. Just remember things change now, so remain as pure as you are now" the old man then took a deep breath, and said "go now, the doctor will bring you the flower of the Occulim. I love you all, but my time is near, and Chris is already excited- I can't back out now." He fell silent and laid still, only breathing faintly.
Mindy was in the hall of the medical building with her brother Jake. She was crying because he was older and had taken her doll. "Give it back, or I'm telling" she said in-between sobs. "Like she's going to believe you over me" Said the blond haired boy, who was about to turn eight and was much taller than Mindy. The sound of clicking sounded down the hall, and the boy dropped the doll and quickly sat down - as though he had been a good child. "Mommy!" said little Mindy as she ran and hugged her mother's leg, but when Mindy looked up- she forgot about her problems, because it was clear her mother had been crying. "Why are you crying mommy?" she said, Sarah wiped her eyes and looked down at her daughter "I could ask you the same question." Mindy had never seen her mother cry, and at her young age knew something was wrong. "Nothing mommy, I was just sad" Jake smiled to himself because he knew that Mindy decided not to tattle. "Mom, when can we go, I'm tired of being here." said Jake as he stood. "Jake we will leave when I say it's time, so sit back down- or I will call your father." Sarah then looks to Mindy "why are you sad honey?" Mindy smiles and said "it was because I missed you, but now you're here I'm happy" Sarah tears up again but this time, she kneels down to hug Mindy closely so she can't see her face "I love you dear, you're just like your father."
Medical staff run past the trio in the hall, in the direction Sarah had just came. She stood up and she and Mindy held hands silently watching the staff enter the old man's room. "what's happening Mommy?" but Mindy received no response from her mother, and Jake had even walked and stood next to Mindy but still looked bored. Sarah knew what was happening, but couldn't bring herself to tell Mindy or Jake, so she just stood quietly- knowing her father had passed. Wilson R. Floyd the five-hundered year old White Flame of the Occulim had died. Sarah's knees became weak, and she started to feel sick. She felt the room spinning as though she would fall, in her mind all she could see was her father's young smiling face. Mindy and Jake notice their mother stumble and start to faint but when she started to fall Mindy tried to catch her mother and Jake stepped back scared. Sarah's full body weight fell directly on little Mindy, and caused a large cracking sound..... they both lay silently on the ground, Sarah on top of Mindy and Jake stood there motionless.
If anyone wants to hear more, just comment.
"It's difficult to understand how life works Mindy. Sometimes decisions can seem very simple, but other times impossible. It's all just a matter of mindset, motivation, and preparation." said the grey headed man to his black haired granddaughter. Six year old Mindy's little green eyes, examined her grandpa's face, wondering why everyone had been so sad and visiting him so much lately. "Grandpa, will you go outside and play with me?" she said as she gripped her doll. "I would love to, but I can't leave this bed dear. Also,-" he was cut short by a tall, thin blonde headed woman's heels clicking as she entered the room. "Mindy dear, leave your grandfather alone. He needs to rest". The old man couldn't make out the woman's face because of his aged eyes, but knew her by her voice. "Mindy's not bothering me Sarah, I'm enjoying her company,".
"Dad, you're exhausted. You need to go to sleep!.... Honestly, I think this whole situation is insane- let us heal you!" she said placing her hands on her hips. Mindy pulls out a band-aid from her pocket, and places it on her grandpa's arm "all better grandpa!" He smiles but Sarah's face wasn't happy, and she walks over and kneels down in front of Mindy, who is now facing her mother's blue eyes. "Sweetie, why don't you go play with your brother." Mindy gripped her doll tight, "But brother is mean, and I want to help grandpa!" she said, looking away to avoid eye contact and puffs her little red cheeks in frustration. "GO!" said Sarah, and points towards the door. Mindy turns and hugs her grandfathers arm, and then runs out of the room.
"Why are you mean to her Sarah-bear?" said the old man as his grey, useless eyes searched for a silhouette of his daughter. "Dad, I'm well into my years. Please, do-not call me that anymore, it's degrading." said Sarah as she pulled the band-aid off of his arm. "Please, let us take you to the healer!" she continued as she placed a hand on his head, to check his temperature. "I'm sorry dear, but you know I don't want that," said the old man, as he closed his eyes. "It's not always about what you want, you have a family that needs you," said Sarah in a motherly and stern tone. "I have lived for well over five-hundred years. I have seen things and experienced more than a person should. It's my time dear, plus Chris is tired of waiting for me on the other side. He wants to pass through the gates of Bliss together, and you know how long he has been waiting."
"Dad, you can talk to Chris when-ever you want! His spirit is still in the Occulim of Light, which you can travel to when ever you want too." Said Sarah, still in a stern tone. "That's not the point!" he said, quickly and coughing and covering his mouth. Once he finished he removed his hand, and blood covered it. "You can make all of this go away, and stay here with us for-ever!" she said, but his face was now annoyed. "Please leave dear, but before you go know this. Just because we can heal ourselves, when-ever we want- that doesn't mean we should. Everything that is born must die, otherwise the world would be over-run!" Sarah tried to interject but the old man continued. "You are my daughter, and never once did we let the fact you where adopted interfere with you inheriting my power once I die. However, once you take in my power- you will also be passing it on to your children Mindy and Jake, because they are of blood realation to you. You know well the balancing act it takes to remain alive, considering you are in your two-hundreds and look like you're twenty-six. Just remember things change now, so remain as pure as you are now" the old man then took a deep breath, and said "go now, the doctor will bring you the flower of the Occulim. I love you all, but my time is near, and Chris is already excited- I can't back out now." He fell silent and laid still, only breathing faintly.
Mindy was in the hall of the medical building with her brother Jake. She was crying because he was older and had taken her doll. "Give it back, or I'm telling" she said in-between sobs. "Like she's going to believe you over me" Said the blond haired boy, who was about to turn eight and was much taller than Mindy. The sound of clicking sounded down the hall, and the boy dropped the doll and quickly sat down - as though he had been a good child. "Mommy!" said little Mindy as she ran and hugged her mother's leg, but when Mindy looked up- she forgot about her problems, because it was clear her mother had been crying. "Why are you crying mommy?" she said, Sarah wiped her eyes and looked down at her daughter "I could ask you the same question." Mindy had never seen her mother cry, and at her young age knew something was wrong. "Nothing mommy, I was just sad" Jake smiled to himself because he knew that Mindy decided not to tattle. "Mom, when can we go, I'm tired of being here." said Jake as he stood. "Jake we will leave when I say it's time, so sit back down- or I will call your father." Sarah then looks to Mindy "why are you sad honey?" Mindy smiles and said "it was because I missed you, but now you're here I'm happy" Sarah tears up again but this time, she kneels down to hug Mindy closely so she can't see her face "I love you dear, you're just like your father."
Medical staff run past the trio in the hall, in the direction Sarah had just came. She stood up and she and Mindy held hands silently watching the staff enter the old man's room. "what's happening Mommy?" but Mindy received no response from her mother, and Jake had even walked and stood next to Mindy but still looked bored. Sarah knew what was happening, but couldn't bring herself to tell Mindy or Jake, so she just stood quietly- knowing her father had passed. Wilson R. Floyd the five-hundered year old White Flame of the Occulim had died. Sarah's knees became weak, and she started to feel sick. She felt the room spinning as though she would fall, in her mind all she could see was her father's young smiling face. Mindy and Jake notice their mother stumble and start to faint but when she started to fall Mindy tried to catch her mother and Jake stepped back scared. Sarah's full body weight fell directly on little Mindy, and caused a large cracking sound..... they both lay silently on the ground, Sarah on top of Mindy and Jake stood there motionless.
If anyone wants to hear more, just comment.