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June 7th, 2012, 06:24 PM

June 7th, 2012, 07:00 PM
I think i can learn alot from the way you write your descriptions are detailed but not to lengthy. This makes reading it alot nicer than massively long sentences, to read.

June 7th, 2012, 09:17 PM
Thanks very much! I really concentrate on my sentences and try to get a good rhythm of lengths and word sounds

June 8th, 2012, 12:34 AM
Hi there! I noticed you commented on my work so I decided to return the favor. So far I really like the word choice in your story. It manages to sound sophisticated without sounding overly wordy. It's something that is a great skill and its nice to read stories that use it :)