GostPhareal
November 25th, 2011, 07:58 PM
This is a short excerpt i have from a book I have started a year ago. It is a TV add appearing in chapter 2. This TV add introduces the reader and most importantly one of the main characters to a planet where most of the story line will be taking place later in the book. I just wanted to know what you thought. Thanks for any comments in advance.
As she stopped, the logo of STO appeared on the screen. Its motto: “delivering the future” came right after. It disappeared to reveal a helicopter view of nothing that looked like Earth. The helicopter was going over a large lake. The only signs that it was a lake were the mountains surrounding it on the horizon. The lake seemed to be infinite and the mountains seemed to be infinitely far. When the helicopter finally reached the end of the blue emptiness, it arrived on top of a waterfall. The waterfall was a good hundred meters high, falling from high cliffs.
The helicopter followed river that was supplying the waterfall. The river was going through high canyons, looking almost like the Grand Canyon, but higher. The canyon seemed to close on the helicopter as it went forward. Suddenly, the helicopter went up, to avoid the canyon, and gave a magnificent view of the whole region. As it arrived high in the sky, in the horizon, a forest started to shape up as the canyon was dying off, shrinking to dust and sand.
The desert, where the canyon had been, stopped where the luxuriant forest started. Everything opposed them, but still they were neighbours. It was as if there was a border. It was as if no plants could live across that border. Whatever unnatural event caused this natural barrier, the helicopter soon passed over it, leaving the desert only in memories. As the helicopter climbed even higher in the sky, white peaks could be seen in the distance watching over the forest.
Heading towards those white peaks, the helicopter was speeding above the seamless forest. All the trees were at the same heights and nothing seemed to grow over that invisible limit. As the helicopter was approaching the mountains in the background, a giant bird suddenly appeared in front of the helicopter only to leave a black screen with an ironic yet humoristic sentence: ‘No birds were harmed for this video’.
As she stopped, the logo of STO appeared on the screen. Its motto: “delivering the future” came right after. It disappeared to reveal a helicopter view of nothing that looked like Earth. The helicopter was going over a large lake. The only signs that it was a lake were the mountains surrounding it on the horizon. The lake seemed to be infinite and the mountains seemed to be infinitely far. When the helicopter finally reached the end of the blue emptiness, it arrived on top of a waterfall. The waterfall was a good hundred meters high, falling from high cliffs.
The helicopter followed river that was supplying the waterfall. The river was going through high canyons, looking almost like the Grand Canyon, but higher. The canyon seemed to close on the helicopter as it went forward. Suddenly, the helicopter went up, to avoid the canyon, and gave a magnificent view of the whole region. As it arrived high in the sky, in the horizon, a forest started to shape up as the canyon was dying off, shrinking to dust and sand.
The desert, where the canyon had been, stopped where the luxuriant forest started. Everything opposed them, but still they were neighbours. It was as if there was a border. It was as if no plants could live across that border. Whatever unnatural event caused this natural barrier, the helicopter soon passed over it, leaving the desert only in memories. As the helicopter climbed even higher in the sky, white peaks could be seen in the distance watching over the forest.
Heading towards those white peaks, the helicopter was speeding above the seamless forest. All the trees were at the same heights and nothing seemed to grow over that invisible limit. As the helicopter was approaching the mountains in the background, a giant bird suddenly appeared in front of the helicopter only to leave a black screen with an ironic yet humoristic sentence: ‘No birds were harmed for this video’.