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You Wont Know Me
July 22nd, 2010, 03:14 PM
i entered a room where
axiom
and
intercept
chased each other round
to the sum of infinity

calling out
in an innate language
of symbols and complex numbers

so for assimilation's sake
i searched far between logic and
her variable offspring
for a friendly face/space

and discerned possibility
in the feeble phantom
of a lonely old friend

yet i could not bring myself
to find my self
a seat.

SilverMoon
July 22nd, 2010, 11:24 PM
Hi, YWNM. When I first read your title, I thought "Oh no, Math. My forever worst subject in school. Be objective here." You took this subject and manipulated it in a very fine way, expressing the human experience. Your last two stanza's especially so:


so i looked far between logic
and her offspring
for a friendly face/space
Very grabing!



yet despite seeing possibility in an old friend,
it was not within me
to find myself
a seat
An excellent wrap up.

Thank you for the read. Laurie

Gumby
July 23rd, 2010, 01:23 AM
I know that feeling well. Math and I just couldn't hit it off. :tongue: I do think you have a very unique take on it here, that I thoroughly enjoyed.

MFinn
July 23rd, 2010, 01:48 AM
I did pretty well with math. Even though i did well, I still enjoyed your poem

Chesters Daughter
July 23rd, 2010, 08:37 PM
This is very clever. Math always came easy to me, but it inspired intense anxiety in many of my friends. You've captured that brilliantly. As Laurie cited, myself needs to be joined. Nicely done.

You Wont Know Me
July 24th, 2010, 10:36 AM
Thank you everyone :)

I've put in a new draft that's more explicit about my meaning behind the poem. I'm not bad at maths, but recently I've taken a stronger liking to subjects like literature and this poem's meant to express that, the change of mindset.

Laurie, ChestersDaughter: Haha yes. I actually did mean it to be my self, as in my inner self, but i guess that was too subtle. Hopefully it's less so now. I'm glad you noticed it. I'm actually trying to put a huge space from my to self, extending to match the 'self' of the 'myself' in the line above it, but I can't get it to work.

Haha Laurie apologies for the traumatic memories, and thanks for reading despite them