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Robert
June 22nd, 2010, 11:54 AM
I fear
losing touch with nature
as my disease progresses
scanning my environment
for signs that I am loved….

But I see nothing
and my heart rate falters
as my mind descends into oblivion.

Surely
someone is there
someone must care
and my heart rate drops
into cardiac arrest
as I see in the distance
the silhouette of Raven
disappearing over the horizon
beckoning me to follow….

Looking into my own darkness
I find a new awakening
as the Light of another world
another time
takes my hand
and I am at last
enwrapped in the arms of
Love.

ash somers
June 26th, 2010, 03:25 AM
yes, fear can be quite debilitating and i've often thought
the opposite to fear could in fact be love? nice work

good food for thought at the very least, cheers

and regards, ash :)

Foxryder
June 27th, 2010, 08:50 PM
I especially like the twist at the end of the poem. It was optimistic and encouraging. The 'Light' as indicated by the persona in the poem must be the unchallenged hands of redemption.


Thanks for sharing,

Fox.

SvirVolgate
June 27th, 2010, 10:16 PM
"as I see in the distance
the silhouette of Raven
disappearing over the horizon
beckoning me to follow"

I like this poem, but I think that this image is really cliche. That being said I love your second line. It's very blunt, but says a lot.