Thread: Project Rubicon

Rubicon

Summary;

Light clashes with darkness as headstrong mercenaries of Rubicon offer their service to the virtuous. With the Black War engulfing the lands, the sky will blacken with hatred, the oceans tainted with blood, and the lands cursed with corpse. Rubicon find themselves in a chaotic situation through unfortunate catastrophes. As the favor begin to shift standpoint to the corrupted, they must choose a side.

Rubicon... A limit that when passed permits of no return and results in forced commitment.

Plot;

• Rubicon follows a strict principal and agent protocol and only contracts with the morally right.
  
• Landa the continent's superpower begin to invade Phraed for reasons unknown.
  
• Phraed's fate lay in the hands of Rubicon; join Landa, or total genocide of Phraed.

Subjected to change.

Prologue

In the beginning there was only a void; it was everything and nothing, somewhere and nowhere, and it was able to bend the laws of physics. It was something that was incomprehensible.

The enigmatical void was the pupil of Judeus the Creator. For uncountable years he existed trying to untie the knot between infinite and existence. Existence clearly contradicted infinite as an existence had a beginning and an end.

Hundreds and thousands of years passed before Judeus finally discovered the correlation between eternity and life. And to his findings, he created the first two deities; Triella the God of Essence and Umathor the God of Time.

Judeus preached to the young gods. He taught them everything he knew yet the young gods could not grasp the concept of an endless existence. The Creator wanted his offspring to unravel the mystery themselves hence he envisioned a universe and so, our universe came into being. He extended his divine arms and created the stars, moons, and planets. Triella and Umathor were astonished by their father’s almighty power.

This is a little taste of the world I will be crafting for this story.

Author's note;

I Intend to make Rubicon a trilogy so I need a very stable and flexible foundation. Hit me with criticism and ideas please!

Regards,

Adrian

I am not sure what to say. I don't think the plot is clear. Phraeds fate lies with Rubicon or they join Landa?

Rubicon must choose between;

Joining Landa and Phraed will be spared

or

Not join Landa and Phraed will be wiped out.

Regards,

Adrian

Hey Adrian.

You've sketched out a good overall plot.

But now you need to delve into the human element: the characters themselves. These are the components that your readers will identify with, and the strength of your characters will determine the strength of your story.

So think about who they will be, individually. Give them names. Give them quirks (don't make them all generic, make them interesting). Give them weaknesses and strengths.

When thinking of Trilogies, the first two that come to mind are The Matrix and The Lord of the Rings, just for examples in this discussion.. In the Matrix you have Neo and Trinity, Morpheus, and of course, the villanous Agent Smith. What made the storyline fascinating was seeing how each of these unique characters interacted and clashed with each other.

In LOTR, you had Frodo and Sam, Aragorn, Gandalf, etc.. etc.. Each character's unique attributes enrichening the story.

Your broad plot sounds pretty well thought-out, and I don't think you really need to add any more to it at the moment, because much of the plot will unfold as your characters interact.

Same thing with Landa, the invading empire/regime. Come up with some characters on that side, as well. To me it sounds like they will take on the villain role.. but villains don't always have to be one-dimensional and, even, they don't have to be "bad". They just have to have conflicting goals that oppose the hero(es).

And when the villains and the heroes clash, there's your story.

Hope any of this helps! Your plot sounds pretty epic so far.

@Kyle

Yes I have already given personalities to my characters, each with a distinct background. I do not want to give away too much information about my book since I haven't even finished the first twenty pages. But I will make one thing clear, there will be twist and turns. Right now with this rough outline, many people will think and/or believe that Landa will take the villainous role but I did clarify that the invasion was due to reasons unknown which will not be revealed until the latter part of the book. Every action needs a cause. But thank you for your response and criticism.

Regards,

Adrian

Originally Posted by adriansia

Rubicon must choose between;

Joining Landa and Phraed will be spared

or

Not join Landa and Phraed will be wiped out.

Regards,

Adrian

Why don't Rubicon defend Phread? Or perhaps they don't have to do either. Are they being forced to make a decision here?

To answer your questions;

1. It would be a failed attempt and Phraed would inevitably be wiped out
2. Any suggestions?
3. Yes, they are in a situation where they must choose a side.

Regards,

Adrian

As a reader, I can't see myself liking Rubicon with either option.

But I know I definately would root for Rubicon if they decided to stand up against Landa and defend Phraed (as Robdemanc proposed), despite knowing they would be crushed.

Originally Posted by adriansia

To answer your questions;

1. It would be a failed attempt and Phraed would inevitably be wiped out
2. Any suggestions?
3. Yes, they are in a situation where they must choose a side.

Regards,

Adrian

Ok. I don't have suggestions because its not my story, I am just asking questions about the plot you posted. It was just something that came to mind that you seem to indicate Rubicon must do one or the other. If they cannot default then I suppose you must have good reason in the story for this, but I pointed it out because a reader will need to be comfortable that there is no other way. So as long as you are clear within the story that Rubicon are in the position where they must choose, then that is fine.

Also it will need to be clear that Rubicon cannot defend Phread otherwise it will lead to their demise, so they have no choice but to join Landa.

BTW - It sounds like an interesting story, and the fact you have got us discussing it shows that its well worth writing.

@Rob

Thank you for your feedback. I'm still working on a more detailed plot but overall, that is the general outlook of it.

Regards,

Adrian