Thread: Hiya, i'm new to this...And i have an idea! :D

My Idea...

The BioDogs

In recant times in Japan is a factory that Design, Manafacture and Dispatch Robatronic Dogs world wide. It's like Terminator for Dogs haha. But the story is centred around one Robotic Dog - Natas, Whos training program failed and is shipped to the EU. (As He was too expensive to make just to crush so they let him loose) He is a rebellion, rebbeling against all of his training programs, But he has one program he is not reblling against and that is his programmed master - Who lives in America. He is on a mission to find his programmed master and meets two other failed BioDog Brothers, Ming & Mong, Like Timone and Pumba! They also embark on the adventure. This story will be advanced toward younger adults (16+) As they understand world of war craft and Pokemon. And maybe if i'm successful begin a whole series of 'BioPets'
What do you guys think?

Any writing idea can be made to work - if carried out properly.
There is nothing I would ridicule or say is brilliant, because it all comes down to how the writer can pull it off.
Something brilliant could be made into a disaster, and something that seems a weak storyline could turn into something fantastic.
I have to reserve judgement until I see a sample.

It sounded feasible until the part where they let the cyber dog loose simply because he's too expensive to destroy even though it is defective? Am I missing something here? If it is defective why keep it around? Why can't its parts be used to make another? Why can't it be reprogrammed? These are the questions that come to my mind. Not saying that you haven't worked them out. Just saying that since I don't have the answers I can't say whether the idea is feasible or not. It all depends how you as the writer go about making your idea plausible. We can't just tell the reader that the cyber-dog was too expensive to destroy and expect the reader to accept that explanation without examining it's logic. Not saying that you would do that in your story. Just saying that you just did it in your post and suggesting that you not make the same mistake in your story. Otherwise you will immediately lose reader interest.

Hi guys. Thankyou for th reply an you are both righ i didnt think about why they couldnt use the parts for spares, but if teenagers understand pokemon which is non existant animal things coming from some sort of egg...how does a big animal fit into such a Small egg thing...logically speaking? Or am i just talking a load if crap again hahaha.

Hi guys. Thankyou for th reply an you are both righ i didnt think about why they couldnt use the parts for spares, but if teenagers understand pokemon which is non existant animal things coming from some sort of egg...how does a big animal fit into such a Small egg thing...logically speaking? There are alot of hildrens,teenagers books an cartoons that dont add up..Or am i just talking a load if crap again hahaha.

Hi Holly, It sounds like a really nice idea for a series, I think if you wanted to do a whole bunch of different robotic animals, you could make your target audience even younger, like 10+ as they would have grown up with Ben 10 and other technology based stories.

I think Alfonso is right though in saying that you need to make sure that your story makes sense all the way, even if it is for younger people, they ask more questions than any grown up! Maybe your robotic dog is released because a kind scientist has been tasked with destroying him, but can't stand to see his creation die, so he secretly sneaks him out of the factory where he has been built.

This was actually used in an adult graphic novel that has the same theme as your story, it's called We 3 by Grant Morris and is about a robo-dog, cat and rabbit who all escape from a lab and try to find freedom. Check it out, it might give you some inspiration.

Well, Pokemon is an alternate universe setting, though I think most regions are based upon actual places. That's why they can get away without really explaining why Pokemon come from eggs or even exist at all. If they had wanted to make Ash from Tokyo, Japan for example, then they would have had to go through some kind of mutated science-y gene manipulation explanation first. Kids don't care about that stuff, so they simply used a fantasy world.

World of Warcraft does have an extremely detailed creation story even though its also based in a fantasy world, but as its a video game its optional for the player to actually care about. There's no room for that freedom in a novel, though, so if you pick a real world setting you do need to make sure that everything has a plausible reason behind it instead of just presenting something out of the ordinary and claiming that it's just how things work.

As for your MC's back story, I doubt any successful corporation would ever want consumers to know about a flawed product. I agree that an escape or a scientist feeling bad about scrapping his creation and letting it free secretly would make more sense to a reader.

Otherwise, though, I think you have a cute idea that could really appeal to kids!

I agree with everyone else that you need to work out the logical kinks, and probably set it in a fantasy universe as well--it just seems easier for such a storyline. But other than that, I think it's a fun idea for a series. I can see kids going for it. Good luck.