Thread: My book's back cover blurb

If you are a parent of kids or a kid between 8 and 12, would you buy my book based on this blurb?

Twelve-year-old Alyssa Norris has known nothing but a miserable life in an all-girls orphanage for five years. But one day, she discovers that she has mysteriously received the power to make animals speak. Later, a zoo truck stops by and a monkey invites Alyssa to come to Africa and live with a family. Feeling gifted, Alyssa agrees to go, flees Canada, and arrives in Tanzania. Later, the family leaves Alyssa after she disobeyed a command. When another zoo truck animal suggests a tour of the landscape, Alyssa decides to come. But many surprises and dangers come across their journey.

The story sounds so interesting but you seem to have told the story rather than generally say what the story is about-if you know what I mean

I'd keep the first three sentences, drop the fourth, fifth, and sixth sentences, and the last sentence is optional. The fourth, fifth, and sixth sentences reveal too much of the story. I almost feel as if I no longer need to read the whole book. What kind of family does she live with in Tanzania? A human family or a family of monkeys?

I actually may take that off the market. People on Absolute Write Water Cooler said it was awful and no one would buy it. So I'm rewriting it and changing the entire story (some parts will stay the same).