Thread: my up'n'coming novel in one bloated paragraph

I wasn't sure where else to post this. Bear with me (or redirect me) if it's out of place. Thing is, the book I am working on is thus far largely in outlines, notes, fragments, character bios and my head. It's hard to get a crit on these (maybe a brain scan? ), but I wanted some feedback on the basic concept. So I will sum up the project, entitled "Book of Hours," as concisely as I can.

The simplest way to place the genre is low fantasy (that is, it has elements both of the real world and of fantasy.) It is set entirely-sort-of in a midsize Colorado town called Bethel. The main character, Allison, has just moved there and is also just starting high school. The time span of the book will be four years (s/he drops out of high school midway thru but it's those years.) Bethel is a "thin" place meaning that places, characters, ideas can drift dynamically between the planes of physical reality and supernatural/spiritual reality. In particular, an ill-intentioned being named Crow is seeking to escape from Bethel, where his divine mother has confined him. Little does Allison know that s/he is in fact the earthly manifestation of Crow's mom (via a weird sort of lesbian-themed back story with Allie's mom and an an angel...) I keep saying "s/he" because Allison, over the course of the story, transitions from male to female. Because of complications with pronouns, I decided to narrate it in "first person omniscient" (which isn't real but I don't care.) Other elements of the plot include a romance between Allison and a girl named Rachel, good and bad witches playing tug-of-war with the souls of high school kids, a descent into the underworld, a porcupine named Spike, and a demonic dog-breeder who demands a tithe of human children every seven years. Oh, and it has a happy ending.

If I was younger I would probably read something like that. I lost interest in teenagers when I wasn't one anymore. It still sounds like an okay premise though.

It seems like an okay idea. Of course, everything is in the execution as far as writing goes, so it's hard to say more.

This sounds like yoou might also be able to class it as magical realism, though it's probably going to be YA (insertgenre).

this omniscient first person idea: if she is an earthly incarnation of a divine entity perhaps the narrator could be her higher divine self? Like when a person under hypnosis narrates what's happening, knowing that she's actually living it all in her mind but still equally immersed in the experience. This would be an interesting idea to use in order to explain the presence of a superior divine being in the incarnation of a mere mortal, she's there in mind but not entirely.

Many intriguing elements here, especially the lesbian angel one (that certainly seems to be a first). But I have to tell you, I hate reading about children getting killed. Or animals being harmed. So, my stomach kind of involuntarily tightened when I got to the last couple of lines of your description.