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06-18-2008, 10:46 AM
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Sleeping
Slow and heavy breaths
Watching her at my side
God, she's beautiful
She's the one.
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06-18-2008, 10:56 PM
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#152
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nick, you're doing a fabulous job, so i hope you're not put off by me mentioning, cinquain is written to a strict syllable count of ...
1st line = 2 syllables
2nd line = 4 syllables
3rd line = 6 syllables
4th line = 8 syllables
5th line = 2 syllables
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Originally Posted by SoNickSays...
Sleeping (2)
Slow and heavy breaths (5)
Watching her at my side (6)
God, she's beautiful (5)
She's the one. (3)
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maybe you could try again  |
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06-19-2008, 12:33 PM
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Ah... I'm afraid I read the syllable count on the OP incorrect.
Quote:
line 1 - 2 syllables
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 2 syllables
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I read this like Line 1 has to have 2-4 syllables, and line 2 has to have 3-6 syllables etc.
I apologize. I must remember to read the description carefully. This habit had cost me quite a few points in numerous tests when at school.
I'll try again:
Sleeping
Slow, steady breaths
Watching her a my side
A smile frozen on her lips
Beauty |
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06-20-2008, 01:07 PM
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#154
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Beauty
perfectly formed.
Sighs mist the window as
a lonely watcher imagines
secrets
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06-21-2008, 01:39 AM
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#155
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secrets
left unspoken
between us both, a look
a glance, a nod, a whisper of
knowing
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06-21-2008, 05:26 AM
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#156
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Knowing
What your thinking
A feat I cannot do
I try so hard to be the one
you want.
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06-21-2008, 05:58 AM
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you want
me to see you
so i promise to give
my undivided attention
watching
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06-22-2008, 05:47 AM
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Watching
From far up high
Bustling people below
One destination on their minds
City
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06-23-2008, 03:34 AM
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city
hustle bustle
folks rushing hitherto
honking horns, flashing neon lights
siren
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06-23-2008, 02:04 PM
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Siren.
God, they've caught me!
They're gaining too much speed!
The strong bumper hitting my back...
Caught...
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06-24-2008, 05:40 AM
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weeeeell, it's not too bad, i spose... *blink*
although i've had to improvise the last line
i'm caught
betwixt - between
ensnared by werds spoken
formulating bold conjunctions
to trap
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06-24-2008, 11:00 AM
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to trap -
the hunter waits,
suspended on gleaming
translucent threads, a delicate
danger
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06-26-2008, 05:01 PM
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danger
danger, danger
batten down the hatches
southwesterlys are ripping off
the roof
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06-26-2008, 06:06 PM
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the roof
held by grey slabs
try worshiping the clock
imagination, bring me home
away
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There's not much else to say about that.
Last edited by AA : 06-26-2008 at 06:08 PM.
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06-26-2008, 06:32 PM
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#165
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away
beyond the ken
of mortal men, flying
skyward, ever upward, flights of
fancy
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