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12-03-2007, 07:25 PM
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For the most part, I write because they are stories that MUST BE TOLD.
Serious business.
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12-03-2007, 09:04 PM
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Adept Writer
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: Near wild heaven
Gender: Male
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I suppose i'm a pretend writer. I've posted some poetry and short stories on here, but not much. I haven't truly felt inspired to write anything in months.
I haven't even tried, I want to let the mood take me like it did all my other works. Earlier this year my mind was racing one evening and I was all pent up with emotion. I felt my head was going to burst. The computer was on so just as a way of relieving myself I wrote down my feelings. Personally I think my pain opened up something beautiful. Here it is. http://www.writingforums.com/poetry/...rsion-2-a.html
Now i'm just waiting for more inspiration...
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12-03-2007, 09:27 PM
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#63
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Writing Machine
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: East Coast, US
Gender: Female
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Now i'm just waiting for more inspiration...
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*Hands him inspiration*
Here you go Intel--is that better?
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"I arise in the morning torn between a desire to improve the world and a desire to enjoy the world. This makes it hard to plan the day."
E. B. White
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12-03-2007, 09:50 PM
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Ink Slinger
Join Date: Jul 2007
Location: Out in the bush, Queensland, Australia, far from the madding crowd
Gender: Male
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Originally Posted by SevenWritez
Ox, this is perhaps your best piece yet. I loved the pacing and the voice, and not only that but your diction truly did send this piece home. However, your narrator seems to go on and on about being pretentious yet comes off as an annoying twat himself. Other than that minor gripe I'd say this is the best short story you've written thus far. Great job.
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hahaha. You ain't seen nuthin' yet!
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Originally Posted by Wildcard
I view with distaste the excretions polluting this site, suffering when I read another by-product of the boredom of one with access to a computer and the internet. As I read I feel I am being defecated on, and cling to an idea that one day I may find solace in the words of one who takes pride in their work.
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12-03-2007, 09:52 PM
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Adept Writer
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: Near wild heaven
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Yup, that and you could check out my poem 
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12-03-2007, 09:57 PM
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Ink Slinger
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Originally Posted by Non Serviam
It's true! Many people come here and receive input from tools. I've noticed a substantial number of complete spanners, for example.
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I will say this for WF - I learn new words every day.
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Originally Posted by Wildcard
I view with distaste the excretions polluting this site, suffering when I read another by-product of the boredom of one with access to a computer and the internet. As I read I feel I am being defecated on, and cling to an idea that one day I may find solace in the words of one who takes pride in their work.
Last edited by The Backward OX : 12-04-2007 at 01:01 AM.
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12-04-2007, 12:13 AM
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#67
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Adept Writer
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: America.
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Well, I do agree with Ox in some sense--many people who write fall into a phase where everything must be shown rather than told (I've been there), and this soon transcends into a literary form of retardation. The examples I'm going to list are not greatly developed sentences, but I think they serve what I'm trying to say.
Crap Sentence: "She was scared." Though it does get to the point, it's boring, so we try to show it. However, there's a thin line between showing and not knowing when to shut the fuck up.
Pretentious Sentence, as Ox called it: "His bones rattled like the many corpses rotting beneath their tombs, spittled slicks of sweat crawling down his forehead in undulant hesitations, his breath a cold cloud in the darkness of the streets." I know the sentence was crap, you don't need to tell me twice, but again, I see this a lot (and I used to write it a lot more, which makes me sad), and it's annoying when we understand what you're trying to get at fifty or so words before you get at it.
And now, what I consider the best; a little mixture of both: "His skin crawled, his breaths slowed, and he knew that if the noises came any closer he'd shit his pants." Again, it's a shady construction of words, but if someone ended a sentence saying that a guy was about to shit his pants, I'd definitely read on. There is a bit of showing, but it isn't flasy, it's quick, and then some fun telling at the end ("Shit his pants," not "Wound the cotton of his undergarments in brown smears of excrements.")
Anyways, I just wanted to toss that out as I felt Ox had a good point, if mainly delivered through rash prose. Too much showing = Boring as shit. Too much telling = Bland as shit. A Mixture of both = Fun, fun, fun. Just my two cents.
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12-04-2007, 01:33 AM
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Location: Southern California
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I can't believe I went through all 5 pages reading this sh*t.
I'm going to sleep and dream of panda bears now.
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12-05-2007, 01:11 PM
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Prolific Writer
Join Date: May 2005
Location: In the dark recesses of the mind
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ahhh...the love of a good panda is hard to turn down...*hugs self with happy, warm, panda thoughts*
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Suffer the little children...
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12-05-2007, 11:12 PM
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Ink Slinger
Join Date: Jun 2007
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Originally Posted by Sotheara
I can't believe I went through all 5 pages reading this sh*t.
I'm going to sleep and dream of panda bears now.
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But how could we enjoy NTO's sparkling personality if not for threads like this. After two pages, it should have been obvious it was a big joke spree...
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My hopeful book:
Crap! Haven't posted it anywhere yet, darn!
"Only tyranny cloaks itself in shadows. The light of justice can not be hidden."
www.theoddvillepress.com
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12-06-2007, 07:21 AM
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Join Date: Jul 2006
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Those two things don't and can't serve the same purpose in existing.
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A book is meant to convey meaning. A car is meant to convey a person. Not identical purposes but similar enough for the simile to work quite well.
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If we all wrote for the same average reader, no great works of literature ever would have been produced.
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If the basic tools of writing were merrily thrown away no great works of literature would ever have been produced.
Which is what the discussion is actually about.
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Where are we going in this handbasket anyway?
Last edited by Foxee : 12-06-2007 at 05:19 PM.
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12-06-2007, 04:20 PM
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Moderator
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Location: Indiana
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Quote:
Originally Posted by FeathersOfDust
useless simile.
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No such thing.
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12-06-2007, 05:14 PM
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Adept Writer
Join Date: Feb 2007
Location: Goomalling, Western Australia
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Originally Posted by smilinghelps
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Sorry Ox, I agree with Truth-Teller.
Ever TRY to walk? Ever TRY to breathe?
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Yes ... after my spine was crushed ...
managed to get the breathing bit right shortly after ...
but had to keep trying to walk for more than a year ...
even now, 18 years later, I still cannot take walking for granted
as I did before ...
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Nature abhors perfection - cats abhor a vacuum!
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12-06-2007, 11:35 PM
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Join Date: Nov 2007
Location: Oshawa, Ontario, Canada
Gender: Male
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Originally Posted by Shawn
No such thing.
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He farted like a cloud
THAT IS USELESS AS IT MAKES NO SENSE |
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12-07-2007, 12:15 AM
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Banned
Join Date: Jun 2007
Posts: 1,414
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Bwahahhahahahahaha!!
That's not even a simile or a metaphor.
(shakes head)
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