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A couple of observations:
If this style is aimed at children, then altering the spelling (e.g. night to nite) does them a disservice. Talking and listening to people talk is how we learn language. Reading is how we learn to spell. More formal systems for that are add-ons. If everyone wrote as you described, we'd produce a generation best suited for drafting copy for bar signs.
Natually you don't want to talk above a child's level, but you also don't want to insult their intelligence and ability to learn. Obviously I don't know what age you're writing for, but in general the goal accuracy, not simplicity.
Another consideration is this: if all the words used are as short and simple as possible, it might render the results awfully hard to read. It'll be reduntant, staccato, stilted. Then there's the contrast to dialogue. The more outrageous the narration style, the more obvious it becomes when dialogue is used. Unless you want to fill it with dialogue that also doesn't approximate normal communication.
By all means find a voice, but in my opinion, I think some of your priorities are out of whack here. Consider Dr. Seuse. Very simple, yet not at all what you described.
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