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10-28-2006, 07:22 PM
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Advice Needed...
I've been writing a story (Short story, Novella or whatelse, I don't know yet.), and I am unsure on how to improve a certain part.
So basically, to describe the part, my protagonist decides to cross the road, but then suddenly almost gets hit (by a car that is speeding). If you could maybe suggest a few good onomatopoeias (The best I could think of was screech...which I believe there is a better one than this, it just hasn't come to mind). Also, if you have any other suggestions on how I may go about writing such a thing, I'd be please to hear the advice.
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10-29-2006, 01:29 AM
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*thump*, it's used and for good reason, too. i guess it also depends on how would you like that collision to happen. picturing it in your mind, would you like your protag to fly into the air? would your prefer a more elastic collision? hell, you could even describe the collision in terms of whether or not kinetic energy was conserved. (momentum is always conserved that was a given). but since the tires screeched, i'm assuming the collision wasn't "too" brutal. but i think any word that starts with c or k works.
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10-29-2006, 01:02 AM
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Prolific Writer
Join Date: Oct 2006
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You should watch some good ol' classic Batman. That show is packed with onomatopoeias. Wam! Bap! Slam! Boom! Crunch! Thwap! Schmack! Thunk!
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10-29-2006, 01:08 PM
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hey, guys!... he said 'almost gets hit'!!!... the sound he's looking for is the car's swerving to miss or slamming on the brakes...
addis...
if the protag doesn't get hit, why do you need a sound effect at all?
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10-29-2006, 01:27 PM
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Join Date: May 2006
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One word isn't going to affect your story, man. Concentrate on writing it first, then see what happens.
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10-29-2006, 01:31 PM
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Wordsmith
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more good advice!... when you finally finish the piece, you'll probably find the title you were so in love with is NOT the only or best one, after all...
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10-29-2006, 04:55 PM
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Thank you all. I think I'll take mammamaia's advice (About not using an onomatopoeia), and see how it goes from there.
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