Creative twist needed - Writers Forum

writer806 · 10-02-2006, 07:44 PM

Hey all. I need some ideas for a plot/conflict. Here's what I have so far in my latest creative writing story:

Main character is a rookie EMT/paramedic on her first day with her smart-a$$ partner. They get a call for a woman in cardiac arrest, go to her house, and try to save her. The rookie EMT is nervous and makes a few minor mistakes.

That's all I have so far and can add/cut things out. I just need a creative conflict/idea for what can happen next.

Ideas? Thanks in advance.

mwd · 10-02-2006, 08:42 PM

The rookie EMT is nervous and makes a few minor mistakes. Her partner makes a major mistake and the woman dies, then blames it on the rookie EMT.

Fantasy of You · 10-03-2006, 02:17 AM

That's what I was about to say, lol.

Fixed · 10-03-2006, 03:31 AM

The rookie and partner both make similarly big mistakes, an argument starts telling eachother not to make anymore stupid mistakes and eventually because of this arguing they keep making stupid mistakes or simply stop trying to save the woman at all who dies, the parter blames it on the rookie
(pretty much what the above said)

or
the rookie has to make up for the mistakes and only sees one way to save the woman but it is a huge risk, the partner doesn't want to do it and risk her life so she will direct the rookie who in the end manages to save the woman but the rookie won't come out unharmed, most likely have a serious injury which might have changed the rookie's appearance somehow (scar etc)

S1E9A8N5 · 10-03-2006, 10:44 AM

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The rookie EMT is nervous and makes a few minor mistakes. Her partner makes a major mistake and the woman dies, then blames it on the rookie EMT.

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Originally Posted by Fixed

The rookie and partner both make similarly big mistakes, an argument starts telling each other not to make anymore stupid mistakes and eventually because of this arguing they keep making stupid mistakes or simply stop trying to save the woman at all who dies, the partner blames it on the rookie
(pretty much what the above said)

These are two of the main outcomes people will think of. At least I think so. When I'm reading or watching a movie and there is a conflict. I always think before hand, what are the possible outcomes to this? One show I was watching, I was surprised that they didn’t do either one of the things I said. The cliché, predictable outcomes... But they did do both at the same time which surprised me.

What about if the Rookie EMT at first we see is nervous and makes a few minor mistakes... Her partner makes a huge mistake, and not only blames it on the rookie but he killed the woman on purpose?

Janeka · 10-03-2006, 11:28 AM

How about the rookie makes a few minor mistakes, but nothing major, managing to revive the woman. The partner undermines her in front of the gathering crowd (or gathered relatives or whoever...), belittling her and berating her for the mistakes. The pair argue, during which time the woman relapses. The partner pushes the rookie aside and takes over, but makes a fundamental mistake with the paddles / shock unit (I don't know the name) and recieves a major shock and dies, as does the original patient. The onlookers misinterpret the situation as the rookie having sabotaged the equipment to gain revenge on her partner...

Janeka · 10-03-2006, 11:33 AM

Or, the rookie is nervous but makes no mistakes, but despite the patient making encouraging progress, she dies unexpectedly. The partner berates the rookie and blames her in front of the patient's family. Rookie feels guilty and racks her brain to understand why the patient died.

Turns out that the partner is a so-called angel of death (medic with no interest in saving lives, just interested in having the power of life & death over his victims) who managed to kill his last partner after they figured out what was going on (they managed to make it look like an accident though, so nobody suspects initially). Rookie then faces a race against time trying to prove her theory before the partner realises that she's onto him and gets the opportunity to see her off too... The partner would need to be a well respected medic of good standing though to ensure that no-one would believe the rookie without significant proof

Janeka · 10-03-2006, 11:38 AM

Or... the patient dies following a major mistake by the rookie. The partner blackmails her, forcing himself on her (making use of the fact that the patient lived alone and there are no witnesses) whilst threatening to have her struck off for gross negligence or incompetence...

imrhati · 10-03-2006, 02:17 PM

the EMt accidently kills the woman by injecting her with the wring medicines. The medicines have a unknown effect and turn her into a zombie.

Mr. Blix · 10-03-2006, 02:18 PM

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Originally Posted by writer806

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Main character is a rookie EMT/paramedic on her first day with her smart-a$$ partner. They get a call for a woman in cardiac arrest, go to her house, and try to save her. The rookie EMT is nervous and makes a few minor mistakes.

That's all I have so far and can add/cut things out. I just need a creative conflict/idea for what can happen next.

It turns out the smart @ss EMT is really Jesus. How's that for your twist??

PAGEMASTER · 10-03-2006, 02:47 PM

They lose the woman and her husband blames them both for their carelessness, later on the smart ass partner is found dead, no evidence, but it shows he suffered, the rookie EMT then receives a phonecall, a voice says nothing, other than 'you're next'. She realises shes in danger, attempts to pack and flee her apartment where she lives alone but she hears something, someones inside, she escapes, but that doesn't stop the murdering husband out to seek revenge for what has happened to his beloved one.

kagechaos · 10-03-2006, 03:22 PM

How about the woman in cardiac arrest is Mary? (Jesus' mother)

Just how creative did you want it to be? If I might ask.

Fantasy of You · 10-03-2006, 03:47 PM

The woman saved is an arshole and sues the hospital for the rookie's mistakes, even though her fat life has been saved.

zallan · 10-03-2006, 04:40 PM

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Originally Posted by writer806

Main character is a rookie EMT/paramedic on her first day with her smart-ass partner. They get a call for a woman in cardiac arrest, go to her house, and try to save her. The rookie EMT is nervous and makes a few minor mistakes.

The rookie EMT-paramedic struggles under the shadow of the egomanical partner, so there should be a large drama conflict, and perhaps she discovers from rummaging around the room or house, that there is a serious medical condition that the partner is unaware of. So in the nick of time, she prevents the flaw in her partner's plan. Then this splits into several outcomes of mine.

Outcome 1: The partner is actually attempting to keep the victim in cardiac arrest long enough to find the key access to her bank account.

Outcome 2: The victim isn't in cardiac arrest at all - she is a sadistic serial killer set on torturing her saviors.

Outcome 3: The rookie EMT-paramedic makes a mistake and kills the victim, but when she wakes up the next morning, she finds that the very same day, time repeats until she finds the way to save the victim.

Well that's it.

Mr. Blix · 10-03-2006, 05:34 PM

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Originally Posted by kagechaos

How about the woman in cardiac arrest is Mary? (Jesus' mother)

Combine our ideas and we've got gold!