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Old 05-16-2006, 07:33 PM   #1
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Names for Westerners and ideas on the storyline?

I'm writing a story about a man who works for a big crime boss during the 1800s. Sorry, the idea is kinda long!

A crime boss, stationed in who specializes in selling opium, which he receives from a Chinese immigrant, a powerful man with many allies, who works in San Francisco during the 1880s, goes to a secret warehouse where he normally receives his shipments and finds a wagon emptied, the drivers murdered, weapons gone.

He begins to suspect that the Chinese man, who is named Yung Shao Fat, nicknamed California Fat, murdered the drivers and is sending hitmen to murder the Boss, so he retaliates by sending one man, the protagonist, to murder Yung Shao Fat and his accomplices, who the Boss believes to be his own employees turned traitor.

The protagonist stays at a small town in Southern California in which everyone but the local priest seems hostile. He assumes it's because he's a newcomer and the town is small.

He stays at an inn and the town seems to have taken an extreme interest in him. The Salon's bartender's daughter is a little younger than him and is shy at first, but begins to talk to him. She and the priest, who has now developed a great friendship with the protagonist, cause him to forget the reason he has been sent after California Fat.

I don't know where to go from here; any ideas?
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What I want to know, is how the heck do the priest and the babe make him forget why he's after California Fat? Do they give him lots of drugs and screw him over, or is it hypnosis or something?

Suggestions: Start writing? Keep writing? Add some extra sub-plots that will spice it up even more and make it really interesting? Kidnap the girl? Make the priest do something awful and profane? Send in the mob? Take it up a notch, that usually helps.

As for names, Google search 19th century Cowboy names, that should find you something to work with.

Have fun,

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You better work on writing clearly first!

Your idea sounds fun tho.
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Think about going off of the "Hotel California" concept. Maybe California Fat already got him. This just looks like a great place for a lot of dead people to hang out.
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I think I'm going to change it up a bit; I'll write back with an update soon.
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Names for Westerners


Many westerners came from the east - either directly, or their parents did. A big chunk of them, too, were families from recent ethnic groups - ie Irish. You could look to, say, "Gangs Of New York" for period names.

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