somethingsimple

I want to submit some of my poetry for publication but what is the best form to submit a poem? Would you submit a poem like this?




What I Learned As a Child










What I learned as a child
Is a hide-and-seek thing of the past,
My heart so empty, as asthmatic pain,
Cannot be filled with joy,
As gladness isn't anymore,



What I learned as a child won't hurt
me anymore I feel if I weep I won't,
Stop crying,

How can I bare my shattered heart when
Its filled with anger inside,

What I learned as a child
Is a hide-and-seek thing of the past,
My heart so empty, as asthmatic pain,
Cannot be filled with joy,
As gladness isn’t anymore,

Or would you submit a poem like this?



What I learn as a child I cannot hide from the past, my heart is too empty to be filled with joy, as joy
isn't anymore, What I learn as a child want hurt me anymore. I feel if I cry, I want stop crying.

What I learn as a child, I cannot hide from the past the troubles that hunt me so. I have tried for, so long to forget about the past but what's left of me now isn't anymore.

Ok Please help! I'm new to this.

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journyman161

Most publishers will have guidelines for what & how to submit. But for layout, you'd lay it out as you want it to be, ie. as a poem, not a series of paragraphs.

I doubt the publisher will want to edit it to look like peotry or manage to get the line breaks where you want them. It's your work & so should be presented as you want.

Good luck!

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somethingsimple

Thanks for your help I'm looking forward from hearing from you for help next time.

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mammamaia

only the poet her/himself can decide in what form/shape a poem is best presented... so, you submit it in whatever way you wrote it...

of the hundreds of poems i've written, probably no two are alike in shape... it's up to you to write it the way you feel its content is best displayed...

but don't put more than a single line space between stanzas or after the title and byline, as you did above...

if you need more detailed help/advice/info, don't hesitate to drop me a line, as i work with lots and lots of budding poets...

love and hugs, maia
maia3maia@hotmail.com

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