Dookie

The thing thats stopping them from, as you've so elegantly put it, blowing him to pieces is that this is the real world and people dont blow each other to pieces

Chapter three and going strong

MetalDog

I want to live on your planet. People kill each other all the time on mine - including violent and rapid dismemberment.
Usually for pretty piss-poor reasons too =(

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Dookie

Metaldog let me explain you've misunderstood. I simply meant that this character is just not that unstable. Yes he is clinically insane, but...not so much that he blows up things.

Anyway, he's just a normal guy. He doesnt know how to blow things up

valeca

Two things...

If you've only written chapter one..how have you 'gone too far' to fix it? Even if all the planning/plotting were in place (which seems unlikely from your earlier posts on WF), that stage is/would be the perfect time to review the ideas and make corrections. Chapter one and a partial of chapter two hardly seems like 'gone too far'.

And in the 'real world' people do, in fact, do horribly unspeakable things to each other. By comparison, 'blowing each other to bits' barely even registers a blip on the nightly news.

Oh, and ripping into a well known member wasn't the best way to go, if you're looking to make nice with the people at WF

Ok, I lied, that's three things. Ah well.

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Dookie

Ah come on she ripped into me first, i got offeneded and defended myself now I apologise for that folks please stop bringing it up

I'm on chapter four. All the chapters are pretty long and this idea is cemented in my head sorry, no matter how hard you all try the original storyline sticks

Dookie

In fact just to make this official lets get it down in writing. Miawriter, I apologise for my behaviour and for not accepting you just critism.

Selorian

I have to agree with Mammamaia and Val, Mia was trying to help. If you ask for help and get something you'd rather not hear, then you have a reality check coming. The thing so great about the forums here is that people are honest. In honesty, you get true help. If everyone says just the things you think you want to hear, that does you no good at all.

Also, I agree that there is no way that you could be too far along to change it. I've heard of writers doing such extensive rewrites during the second draft that the stories didn't even resemble one another anymore. It is never too late to change things, if it needs to be, then it can be done.


Cliff


Edit... I'll let this stand, but I did see your apology after hitting the post button. Was kind of you to apologize. And, yes, lets get to the writing, that's what this site is about.

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Oracle

"Blowing him to pieces" was just an expression I was using. I'll rephrase.

What is preventing the people from stopping this guy from harming them? How come he's able to get enough power in the first place to release these gases without being arrested?

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It's never too late to change the story. I wrote a whole novel and now, I'm completely rewriting it.

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