jd_armstrong

It's okay guys, I appreciate the honesty. I knew that the best feedback I would get would be from fellow writers, so I bit the bullet and posted my writing.

I knew it would hurt, and I knew I would get over it pretty quickly.

I have always believed no matter how good YOU think you are. There is always someone better. And those are the people you learn from.

There is always... always room for improvement.

So.... now in between working 12-15 hours a day, writing a screenplay for a competition and doing the family thing... I have to find time to rewrite my stories.... aye carumba...

I am going to rewrite another one of my stories first (eventually) that way I wont be influenced overly by Nazareth's changes to my story I posted here (well the beginning of anyway.) Then I will post it back up here.

Also...

Any tips on writing screenplays?

thanx
James

Londongrey

Hello,

So long as the critique is on the construct of the piece and not the writer themselves then there is no need to be offended by critique, which everyone should realise is different from criticism in that it is meant to be constructive and not dismissive. Content can also be mentioned as in plot, themes etc as many will be well covered topics which include cliches such as love, hate etc.

Don't be precious about your work!!

I don't know too much about screenplays, if you are good at spoken word and visual arts this would be a great help. I know people who are criticised for writing a screenplay that sounds like a theatre production and vice versa, I can never understand why and what the differences are!!!

Good luck!

Alex

Oracle

Yeah, you shouldn't fear critique. Personally, I look forward to it. I see it as a way of gaining insight to thing I'd have probably noticed eventually. It really speeds up the editing process.

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Nazareth

Hey JD- I hope you didn't take offense to the cchaNGES I made- That's just how i critique- I'm not trying to change your story on you- think of what I write more as an example, not as an effort to change your story on ya. I've just always found it more helpful to have examples given than for someone to say 'don't do this this way' & not explain how to change it.

When I read writing books- the best help I run across is when the writer shows an ok example, and then rewrites it to show how it could bei improved- I guess I just kinda got into the habit of writing critiques that way-

What I meant to hapen was to look at hte changes I made & see why it helped a bit, and then for you to rewrite those parts in your own words

Not really sure what ya mean by 'being overly influenced' - the advice I gave came straight from the advice of other writing instructions books- So, if you're being 'influenced', it's indirectly through writing instructors- not me- yeah- it's in my own words- but still, the core instructions are from other established writers/instructors - if You'd rather I didn't comment then just say so man- no worries.

Chris

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Clockwork

I don't know a whole lot about screen plays. Sry.

and Oracle is right
Don't fear the reaper...er.. I mean
Don't fear the critique
In the end it's a good thing

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