Emma LB

Hi all!
I'm a bit stuck with a dissertation I'm currently writing, which will account for 5% of my final result for my Abitur qualification. It's on the artist colonies in Newlyn and Barbizon.
I've visited both villages (and the woods of Fontainebleau) and now I would really like to somehow incorporate my own feelings and impressions of the places and maybe stories of what I did there into my dissertation. But I'm not sure how to do this, at the moment it all reads like an art history book, and really that is what my work is suppose to be - an art history. It's such a dry and boring read though and I'm a bit stuck when it comes to describing the places I thought some of you might be able to give me some tips? How might I include my experiences? It's the style that worries me most, should I even be mentioning myself, or just say things like: to a modern traveller it might seem... ?
These places have both changed so much since then, but they were already on the way to becoming what they are now when the artists painted there.
At the moment all I have is a description of Cornwall towards the end of the 19th century.

zza1pqx

You should be getting acedemic supervision on this one.
It's no good a load of would be writers telling you that you should describe 'the rolling magnificence fo the hills, the very hills, steeped in the art of the tortured souls that live a penniless existence upon them', if the people marking your Dissertation says its pap and fail you.

Your tutors will tell you if first or third person description is more appropriate.

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Erm.
Hello.

Emma LB

To be honest my art tutor couldn't care less I think , he just wants the bit I write on the art to correct. I suppose I could ask my German teacher, although I don't think he's any good at English, maybe he tell me something about dissertations though.
Thanks zza1pqx, I just thought maybe someone here had some experience in writing interesting dissertations.