This was indeed a good read. You've got a quite a few SPaG that need to be cleaned up but the language is consistent and drew me in.
I think my only issue was the spearhead sticking out of his neck without him noticing. I don't know the back story and maybe she's able to weave her words in such a way that he doesn't feel the final blow. If not, I might add a piece there to make it clear when the blow occurs and cut the line where he suddenly realizes he's been stuck.
Overall this was enjoyable. I'll have to read over your other posts.