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Thread: Genius in a Suitcase (in Memory of Sylvia Plath)

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    Quote Originally Posted by Rick Keeble View Post
    This is an outstanding piece of work. To me, the title is a very important factor, it must draw the reader into the poem itself.

    Which this does! And the poem is simply extraordinary!

    My tongue is also caught in that stone crevice!
    Thanks for reading, Rick. I did not know you would be pulling this up but thanks. One of my favs, too. Now, get your tongue out of that stone crevice because we need to hear your splendids!

    Quote Originally Posted by sas View Post
    Love this, love this! You've a wonderful way of taking the reader on a journey, without writing a "tell" poem, which is very difficult to do. Masterfully done.

    So, stupid me is going to make comments:

    Kitchen business first stanza: "from" used twice. I see no poetic reason, so assume error.

    Third stanza: consider dropping "the", on end line, down to next. It is weak ending for line.

    Last line (yep, I dare mess with it): Considering metaphor, "Outstanding" seemed disconnected. Maybe:


    Suddenly, Fashionable.

    Smart! To make comments. I missed that repeating "from". Agreed: dropping "the" to next line. Good catches, kitchen business!

    "Suddenly, Outstanding" is the operative word. Her genius, suddenly recognized posthumously - as with so many poets.

    Quote Originally Posted by Nellie View Post
    Laurie, I don't know how I missed this poem when you first posted it. I'm happy it is here for me to read. Outstanding as is.
    You missed this, my friend?! Well then, glad Rick pulled it up!
    Last edited by SilverMoon; July 18th, 2017 at 11:03 PM.
    "Writing has Saved Me from the Sin and Inconvenience of Killing"
    .................................................. .......................... .................................................. . -Alice Walker.........


  2. #12
    Wish I had written this. I wouldn't change a thing. As a student of all things Plath I find your poem not only moving but it hits home with all I know about her. Cleverly written and concise. Well done!

  3. #13
    Thanks, Robbie. Nice to meet someone who is such a devout fan of Plath as myself. Apparently, Kurt Cobain wrote a song about her but forget its name.
    "Writing has Saved Me from the Sin and Inconvenience of Killing"
    .................................................. .......................... .................................................. . -Alice Walker.........


  4. #14
    Lovely tribute to an outstanding poet.

  5. #15
    A very unique perspective, your words have an abstract feel but still relay your theme in perfect order. I am a Plath fan and this one stuck me as a light in the darkness she must have experienced in the final hours. First stanza, lines 3 and 4, from-from feels out of place and really creates a speed bump in the piece but over all this is really good. I loved the white sheets folded neatly in the case line and the ending word, "Dark" really locked that one away.

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