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If you would like your story moved to a different forum, I would be happy to take care of it for you. Generally, though, critiquing goes on in all of the creativity forums.
Btw, I read your story and it doesn't seem like there is too much to tear into. You have some typos and Chris Miller caught a couple of things but other than that, it's a solid story. In your case, although it doesn't help you much, silence may be a good thing.
To get more feedback, keep giving it out yourself and post in some of the other forums. Sometimes it helps if you build up a presence here. If the members get to know you, the next time they see your name in C&A or Short Stories they might check out your work. For starters, try Word Games, Writing Challenge, and the next LM competition (Aug. 22).
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"When you catch an adjective, kill it. No, I don't mean utterly, but kill most of them—then the rest will be valuable." - Mark Twain
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