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Old 03-17-2008, 06:57 PM   #1
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One Thing Left Unsaid

Hey all,
This is my first post outside of the introduction forum.

This story is actually a letter I wrote to a girl that I cant seem to get over. It is meant to circulate on the web to her, so I saved it in picture form and let it fly on myspace.
I know there are a myriad of mistakes and poorly written sections. Well, maybe all of it is poorly written, who knows. This is what I did last night while I couldnt sleep, thinking about a girl and wondering what to do about it.

Feel free to critique the holy living bejezus out of it. I can take it, I'll learn and you won't ever catch me whining about critique. It's how you learn, right?



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i liked it
sorry i dont have more to say

ill probably log on later, read it again, and actually leave you something useful
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Old 03-18-2008, 01:36 AM   #3
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Sorry Mitch but I think your effort was in vain. Photographs behind text detract. As does a long, narrow column.

You're a photographer, you're used to painting a thousand words with light. Change hats; every thousand words paints a picture. Let the words speak for themselves.
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Sorry Mitch but I think your effort was in vain. Photographs behind text detract. As does a long, narrow column. The writing's good, it doesn't need embellishment.

You're a photographer, you're used to painting a thousand words with light. Change hats; every thousand words paints a picture. Let the words speak for themselves.
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