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Old 02-27-2008, 04:02 AM   #1
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Eating Cycles

I know why the caterpillar eats all day; it so desperately wants to be a butterfly. One month in a cocoon unable to eat, speak or hear a thing, seemingly comatose, this impossible metamorphosis takes place. On waking she still believes she’s a caterpillar but slowly starts to celebrate her new found freedom, by fluttering like a child from flower to flower, smelling their scents and moving on. To keep her nubile beauty, she never eats a thing. Eventually, she gets caught in a spiral dance with another butterfly: mates, lays her eggs, and then disappears like chaff in the wind. I know why the caterpillar eats all day and the butterfly never eats a thing, and that they are, in fact, one in the same, yet the cycle still goes on unbroken.
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Old 02-27-2008, 12:15 PM   #2
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I don't see anything that needs to be improved here. Its great!
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Old 03-02-2008, 04:54 AM   #3
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nice and simple and animals
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Old 03-03-2008, 07:37 AM   #4
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I can see what you're getting at and it's a lovely image, but it reads like you're making a revelation, when caterpillers eating constantly to sustain themselves as butterflies is just a fact - it's not anything new.
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