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Old 02-17-2008, 02:46 AM   #1
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"The Forest"

I walked down the stretch of a worn out dirt trail leading down to the crystal blue lake front. Sounds wilderness call out amplified by the surrounding forest. Birds sing their song loud and clear on a day like today, with no clouds in the sky, why would they keep their voices pent up. Winds blow through the trees swaying them back and fourth. The pine needles act like instruments for the cool breezes on a spring day, and make a sound you can only hear out here.
A sea of green colors the landscape mixed in with light browns and blues. Soothing to the eyes melting away my worries, and darkness that once seemed to cover my heart like a blanket has now been bleached clear. The only idea consuming my thoughts now is that of a fish tugging on the line of my fishing pole. The forest has become my sanctuary from the harsh realities of life. Here I can be at peace, and my all the planets seem to align perfectly.
I can not help but wonder why this place is so peaceful. Sitting down on a rock I have often sat on for my fishing ventures; it is hard not to ask the question do animals have traumas like us humans? I honestly hope they don’t have to worry about the things we worry about, maybe that is the reason I find it so peaceful here. We have become so worldly in our train of thought; we tend to forget what is important in this world. These days there are so many people out there who are obsessed with worldly problems. People protesting wars, corrupt corporations and anything else that might piss someone off, I believe they forget to just relax.
So, I come out here to forget all of the craziness in the world. Here is where I can be at peace with who I am. I believe that if more came out to enjoy these woods like I do there would be less chaos in this world. Chaos fills our day to day news, such as celebrities who have become influenced by Lucifer. Corrupt politicians who run our government, and as I see it the protesters who fight against them, whom in my mind cause more problems than they solve. Why is it we are so narcissistic, as to think we can solve all of these worldly problems? In my mind there are men and women who can not be changed. It baffles me to think we can change a person’s mind for them.
I really wish events of our world occurred in a different manor. I wish we could catch every criminal on the streets. I wonder if we will ever have full peace in this lifetime, and I wish I had all of the answers. However, I am only one person, people will think what they think and my sanctuary has become some unknown forest. So I will hide away from this cruel world to make myself feel better, and look I have a bite.
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Old 02-17-2008, 11:00 AM   #2
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Hi Forest,

Happy to have read your story as I am new to this forum and was wondering if any here were interested in the things I think about… the things I write about.

I enjoyed your story as it flowed well and followed a completed thought which in turn gave the reader a bit to think about… good job.

Some might suggest that this story could use a tad more, “show me" in the descriptive parts instead of “tell me” descriptions but that can always come with editing…

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Old 02-17-2008, 01:53 PM   #3
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Thank you for your kind words Cowboy clown. I thought about expanding on the detail as well. This was closer to a free write than an actual draft. Welcome by the way I will keep an eye out for your work.
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