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Old 01-24-2008, 11:53 PM   #1
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i read it and it doesnt seem to work with someone in the 6th grade. it seems like he has to much freedom
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Old 01-25-2008, 08:21 AM   #3
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i read it and it doesnt seem to work with someone in the 6th grade. it seems like he has to much freedom
I don't know, because he went to a movie? I think it works out.
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I think it's interesting and nicely written, although the beginning is a bit awkward:

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Lying on his bed, Blake Connor was reading a story for a book report that was due the next day. Blake resided in a diminutive town in Eastern Ohio.


I think that second sentence doesn't belong there. It sounds wooden and awkward. Maybe you could have Ohio crop up somewhere in the dialogue.
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