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Short Stories Short Stories, usually between 500 and 2000 words.

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Old 01-21-2008, 05:34 PM   #1
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My Loud Mind

Wake up. Everything is in it's right place. Good. I exhale slowly and try to get a grip on it before it gets going too fast. Breathe, in, out, slow, calm. But it doesn't help. I start to race, buzzsaw sound, all inside my head, like a jackhammer dynamite fight. I get up and try to push it out, but it comes, and it stays. The room is clean, why is it happening? What if I'm crazy? Is this how it starts? What if it's perminate? What if I have to live like this? Flash of a gun in my mouth, push it out. I walk into the living room and throw on a DVD. It's YOGA, it calms people. I start to stretch, it feels good. Focus the energy into a positive place, don't be affraid of your own thoughts. Don't be affraid of your own mind. I repeat, and keep going. It helps, and I start my day.

Never be affraid of your own mind, there is some good stuff in there...
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Old 01-21-2008, 06:12 PM   #2
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Nice short-short-short story.

Main problem here is 'block-o-text'. it just makes it hard to read. But sense it was so short, it may not need it.

I found it oddly confusing, like 'jackhammer dynamite fight'. Okay?

Well it was interesting, keep up the good work.
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Old 01-21-2008, 06:15 PM   #3
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It was interesting, pretty short. I would like to see a little more devolpement.
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Old 01-22-2008, 01:42 AM   #4
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hi this is my first post. to me it kinda read like poetry
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