When the morning sunrise
Becomes a magic show
Before your very eyes,
And all the sounds of life
Begin to harmonize
You hear a song of hope,
Surround your senses
And feel the promise of a brand new kind of world

The baby in the picture was the woman of 20, the eldest girl in the picture was her cousin, and the girl cuddling close to her was her sister.

Lose your defenses
Unlock your mind
Unwind and follow me
Come let me help you see
How to find the way to leave yesterday behind

We should be together
when we're this close we're bound to work it out somehow
We found a dream to share
Don't lose it now
Just let my song of love
Surround your senses
And feel the promise of a brand new kind of world

Lose your defenses
Unlock your mind
You know I love you
Come let me show you
How to find the way to leave yesterday behind

Originally Posted by Bubble Burst Balloon When the morning sunrise Becomes a magic show Before your very eyes, And all the sounds of life Begin to harmonize You hear a song of hope, Surround your senses And feel the promise of a brand new kind of world On July 3rd, 2024, a woman of 20 named (named what?) stared at an old picture. She recognized the background, alright – it was the fountain in front of Metrotown at Metropolis. The people, that was a different story. A girl of 10, now 28, was sitting on the edge of the fountain beside a girl of 7, now 25. The girl of 10 held a baby of two, and her smile was a baby's smile: the one no older person could achieve. The eldest, had her two fingers held in a “peace” sign, grinning. The girl of 7 cuddled to the baby, smiling. I don't feel like knowing their exact ages both in the past and present really helps. As long as the reader gets that it was a picture of the woman as a child I think it would serve the purpose. No matter how far she ventured into her memory, she couldn't remember it. The baby in the picture was the woman of 20, the eldest girl in the picture was her cousin, and the girl cuddling close to her was her sister. Lose your defenses Unlock your mind Unwind and follow me Come let me help you see How to find the way to leave yesterday behind The woman couldn't remember it, and no matter how hurt her cousin might have been when she heard her say it, she didn't see how she could want those days to return to her memory. Indeed, she was wondering why people couldn't remember their baby years, the years of no worry... There are too many pronouns here. 'Her' or 'She' is used 7 times and refers to two different people. It makes sense, but gets a little confusing. We should be together when we're this close we're bound to work it out somehow We found a dream to share Don't lose it now Just let my song of love Surround your senses And feel the promise of a brand new kind of world The woman closed her eyes, hand clasped around the picture. She tucked it into her travel bag, zipped it up, and looked up at her tearful looking parents. Indeed, it was a bit sad, she was their youngest child, about to find a whole new world, to leave yesterday behind. She wiped off one of her own tears, then hugged them. I don't like 'looked up at her tearful looking parents'. Describe them some other way. I don't think use "to leave yesterday behind" here and then end on it only a few sentences later. Lose your defenses Unlock your mind You know I love you Come let me show you How to find the way to leave yesterday behind Then the woman walked out the door, and left yesterday behind.

"Hint everything - assert nothing. If you feel inclined to say 'bread and butter,' do not by any means say it outright. You may say anything and everything approaching to 'bread and butter.' You may hint at at buck-wheat cake, or you may ever go so far as to insinuate oat-meal porridge, but if bread and butter be your real meaning, be cautious, my dear Miss Psyche, not on any account to say 'bread and butter'!"

Edgar Allan Poe