Nanny [100 words] - Writers Forum

IanBoltsoy · 10-10-2007, 05:37 AM

Nanny by Ian Boltsoy

Her dying breath escaped from her; pushing forward, her spirit tore from her flesh like Velcro.

"Uncomfortable?","yes, but she had done it before."

Moving forward with a sense of urgency she strode into her grandchild’s room, "grandchild" she had sneered, it wasn’t her son’s child, that was for sure. She could see the life force radiating from the child, a white plume pushing out then being pulled back in. Bending over the crib she sucked in as the child breathed out.

She was being pulled back towards her flesh, her lungs fighting for air.

The child lay still and cold.

SevenWritez · 10-10-2007, 08:11 AM

Way too short, but I really liked what little you gave. Please expand upon this, or post another story.

IanBoltsoy · 10-11-2007, 03:06 AM

Thanks!
The length was intentional as I was going for a drabblet. Not great stories but it does help me with plot and scene outlines.