Cancer and Rape - Page 2 - Writers Forum

SevenWritez · 10-11-2007, 08:11 PM

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Originally Posted by Mermaid on the breakwater

I don't know but you haven't commented on every story on here have you?

No, but I've read all pieces on the front page, including yours. I still smell envy! I'm not sure why I'm using exclamation points all of a sudden. It is ENTICING!

I wasn't aware that you had to "leave your mark," after reading a piece...you have some weird mottos, Mermaid.

Edit: Snorrie and Truth-Teller are obviously jealous. But Snorrie still kicks booty in his own right, so it's ok. Haven't seen anything from Truth yet, but I'm sure it'll be a booty-kicker. Y'dig?

Mermaid on the breakwater · 10-11-2007, 08:20 PM

I have some very weird ones, so weird that they make a lot of sense. But only to weird people, I've got being weird down to an art form.

But, being serious, you said that more people should be commenting and giving this piece more praise, a comment I read after I had commented innitially, I hasten to add. Damn, this is all getting rather cyclical. Moving on - and no, I am not on drugs, not until they send me off to the cuckoo house, anyway - you can't level a criticism at other people for not doing something when you don't do it yourself. Not giving praise, just writing a review for the story, maybe people don't have time to give the review etc etc, just think of any number of reasons you may have for not posting a comment about a story, it's not all jealousy.

It just happens to be 99% of the time. So, in a rather round about way, are we both right?

jhaggard29 · 10-11-2007, 08:26 PM

I thought it was great, but it does seem like a short version of a longer story. Great description of Jack, really calls up a film-noir bad guy with a heart image.

snorrie · 10-12-2007, 04:32 AM

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Orginally Posted by Truth-Teller
Why is this amazing, again? Without a plot or story, the voice means nothing.

Well, come on guru. Let's see your stuff. Obviously your writing is much better than everyone else's on this site, so show us how its done. Or...are you just all talk and no write? My guess is the later. Come on. Prove me wrong, Truth-Gibberish.

Truth-Teller · 10-12-2007, 04:32 AM

Sevenwritez, instead of pangeryzing someone's else work, why don't you improve yours and get better; for I know you can write better than you confess you do. You have this thick Lovecraftian voice I like. Your stories can be deep and raw--you just need to learn to hone your paragraphs into simple, declarative sentences and short strokes.

Truth-Teller · 10-12-2007, 04:34 AM

When my book is on the New York Times Bestseller's List, I will most assuredly come back to you, Snorrie.

Don't worry, hun.

snorrie · 10-12-2007, 04:44 AM

Yeah okay, checks in the mail. I get it. Sorry, my bad. You rock. Oh and by the way, I did see some of your work but you deleted it. From what I've seen, you are nowhere near any of these writers you've bagged on. You're not even in the little leagues. So everyone out there...take this guys comments lightly.

Mermaid on the breakwater · 10-12-2007, 07:50 AM

well, I don't mind truth-teller and if he doesn't want to post his work on the forum I guess that is his choice. Both of the pieces I have posted up are less than 2 hours work because I am working hard on my novel, so I can understand why truth-teller wouldn't want to post anything.

But, truth-teller, when you do post something, I'll definitely give it a read, my man.

Foxee · 10-12-2007, 09:53 AM

This whole second page seems to be only about members of WF trying to cast aspersions on each other's ability. If you're not going to talk about the OP take the discussion elsewhere. 'Harmless' flaming is allowed in the lounge.

Thanks.

~Foxee

SevenWritez · 10-12-2007, 03:34 PM

*Laugh*

Mermaid, I'm being sarcastic when I say others are jealous (I was hoping the exclamation points showed this, but I guess they didn't), I'm just showing my like for this story--it's one of my favorites that I've read on this site. Truth, same for you and Snorrie, I wasn't trying to toss insults, just poking fun. As for my writing, thanks for the compliment, but the two pieces I've posted here (three if you count the third one that I wrote in less than five minutes, and it showed), are complete deviations from what I choose to normally delve in. I'm still 16, so I'm still trying to see what I like writing. I go from overly simplistic to overly descriptive, and I still experiment when writing stories to see if I want to lean one way or strike a balance. "End," and "Approach," I wrote to play around with atmosphere, but there was little to no story in either, and story is what I prefer. And I abhor Lovecraft.

And to the original writer of this piece (I haven't remembered your name yet, sorry) you still haven't posted your second piece. You promised me. You're hurting my feelings. I'm breaking out in a rash, to boot.

Mermaid on the breakwater · 10-12-2007, 04:04 PM

I love it when people say, to boot. It's the greatest coinage man ever coined. And that's from a non-coiner, to boot.

NedRyerson · 10-12-2007, 05:14 PM

I appreciate the criticisms and agree that it could be better. I'm thinking of making it into a much longer piece.
Sevenwritez, I did promise, but I don't wanna post anything till it's ready, and nothing is quite there yet. Get some oinment in the meantime, though...