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Interesting little bit. I don't like the MC very much. I think she's pretty damn selfish to be honest, but I think that might have been what you were going for.
One nit to pick. In a piece where you limit your words to less than 100, I think the verb "to be" should be cut as often as possible. The writing would be more sharp and precise if stronger verbs were used.
That's all I have.
Good Luck.
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