Dana_Johnson

His fingers pressed tightly against his temples. He exhaled a deep breath; the hairs on his arm fluttering gently like a prairie in a soft breeze. Slowly he tilted back his head, stretching his neck. He lightly dragged his fingertips down his rough cheeks, the hairs on his neck standing briskly like a miniature forest of thin, dark trees atop the smooth hills of his spine.

Slowly he opened his eyes, which swam in a shallow pool of quiescent tears, gazing lazily at the blank computer screen in front of him. Gradually the screen began to blur; his gaze traveled down to his keyboard, a plain, uneven brick wall adorned with letters and symbols; all of which he knew, yet the harder he thought, the more foreign they began to look.

He had experienced writers block before, but not of this magnitude. As soon as he began to give up hope, it struck him, and he began to write:

His fingers pressed tightly against his temples…

Mr Sci Fi

Ha! The ending. Very witty.

This piece strikes home, and is loaded with plently of imagery that I can relate to.

So now a paradox exists. A written work about Writer's Block, which stemmed in essence from Writer's Block itself. But the act of writing about Writer's Block contradicts the feelings of Writer's Block, but in a sense the piece would not have existed if not for the Writer's Block in question. Very mind boggling.

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Mike C

Sorry to piss on your fireworks, but I've read that story, in varying lenths and styles, with the same ending, probably 50 times.

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Dana_Johnson

Thank you both kindly for taking time to read, and post on, my work. I appreciate it.

Mr. Sci Fi, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Mike C. I'm sure, having 3,829 posts and being a moderator on a writing forum, you would run into 'stories' of writers block quite often, since a lot of people write from experience. Being a writer...well, having writers block is common among writers and therefore is an experience to write about...At any rate, my fire works remain piss free, so no worries.

Take care,
Dana

snorrie

Watch the use of metaphors. This is a very short piece and there are three here and it cheapens the prose. keep it simple and to the point. You can still get the imagery across withought the use of them. Let them come natural.

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He had experienced writers block before, but not of this magnitude. As soon as he began to give up hope, it struck him, and he began to write:

Right here, the voice changes. It is blunt, unlike the above writing. It seems you shifted gears or added this paragraph after a short break. Keep it consistent. And yeah, we've all experienced writer's block. this piece has been done a million times. At least it got you writing again. More a piece for yourself than for everyone else. Good luck. Keep writing.

Dana_Johnson

Thank you for your input, snorrie, much appreciated.

One thing that seems to make this less desireable to those reading is the fact it's been done so many times...and really, I don't think that should influence how you feel about the actual work.

How many times have people written about Vampires? Countless times, yet while reading a new Vampire Story from someone people don't say "Vampires are written about too often," they judge by the writers ability to write, and their unique style and take on the topic.

Just some input of my own.

Thanks again for reading.

Take care,
Dana