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Old 09-01-2007, 11:31 PM   #1
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The Revolutionary (Quick Read)

“let’s start something.”

“Like what?”

“I don’t know, something like…like, a revolution.”

“That’s nonsense, you can’t just start a revolution.”

“Well, why not?”

“You have to have an idea, as well as lots of patience and a headstrong attitude, none of which you have.”

“Oh ya.”

“But so what? We need one.”

“Ya, we do.”


The hangman’s noose tightened slightly, the cheap rope made his neck itch. What will it matter anyway? Well, here we go—

“This is ridiculous.”

“I agree.”

“Ya, well you agree to a lot of things, but you never say why.”

“We’re of like minds, that’s all. So how bout it?”

“How bout what?”

“That revolution.”

“Ah, that.”


Several loud cracks, screaming and shouting.

“What the hell was that?”

“Let’s go check it out, it sounded like gunshots.”

“Are you crazy?”

“Invariably.”

“Alright, let’s go.”

“Jesus Christ, it’s a bloodbath; let’s get the fuck out of here.”

“Ya.”


“This guy is full of shit.”

“I agree.”

“You can’t tell me that twenty people just happened to be there and expect me to believe it.”

“What’s worse than that though…these people seem to believe him.”

“So how bout it?”

“How bout what?’

“That revolution.”

“Oh, that.”


“Another war?”

“That’s what they’re saying.”

“What the hell are we gonna eat now? They’re control all the food.”

“They just say it’ll be a few days.”

“That’s bullshit.”

“I know. But look around. These people believe it.”


“We should do something.”

“Like what?”

“You know what.”

“Finally.”

“Yes.”


The hangman’s noose tightened.

“this rope is itchy.”

“It won’t matter here soon.”

“I know.”

“Did we do the right thing?”

“If you know something should be said or done, you do it. We did the right thing.”

“Look at them though; they all believe this man and his bullshit.”

“Yes, but at least there is one thing.”

“What’s that?”

“These hangings are happening more oft—“


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Old 09-01-2007, 11:50 PM   #2
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I have no idea what I just read.
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Old 09-01-2007, 11:54 PM   #3
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Umm...I would leave a constructive comment....but, what?
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Old 09-02-2007, 06:18 AM   #4
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A martyr on death row?
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Old 09-02-2007, 01:32 PM   #5
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A sphincter says what?
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Old 09-02-2007, 10:11 PM   #6
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Hey Timex come back and explain it you've got us curious. What's going on here?

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Old 09-03-2007, 11:52 PM   #7
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I suppose this one requires a bit of thought, but a lot of imagination.

Instead of reading the quotes as speech, read them as the thoughts of one man. The thoughts eventually progress (after unseen and hardly described events) to a point where lead him/her to become a revolutionary, and ultimately die for it. It's an easier-to-read stream of consciousness approach.

Hopefully that clears things up a bit.
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Old 07-11-2008, 10:22 PM   #8
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I like this. it's abstract, but meaningful, and besides, I love it when someone thinks outside the box.
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Old 07-13-2008, 08:32 AM   #9
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To each thier own.

Hi Timex----As the sayng go to each thier own, but I wouldn`t want to wager too much on this selling.

Talk to you soon---ablelaz.
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Huh?
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Old 07-13-2008, 11:07 PM   #11
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Heh, I forgot about this one. Nearly everything I post here is an experiment, I just want to get some opinions on how it works. As of now, I'm beyond this, perhaps I'll rewrite it someday so it's a little more coherent.
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What is there to not understand? I liked it.
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